| "The Darkness in Their Hearts" Reviews/Comments [ 30 ] |
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Reviewed By: black fox dawn [MediaMiner Member] On: July 27, 2008 06:23 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
overall i think this is a very enjoyable story and i can't wait to read the next chapter. there were a few misspellings in the story but nothing to big.
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Title: Advice
Reviewed By: Deadberserker [MediaMiner Member] On: January 19, 2008 23:03 CST
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You have an interesting idea and your doing good so far, except are making everything predictable you need to start giving them more challenges. As it is right now the characters are just super powerful and invincible, that doesn't give much room to continue the story. I suggest that you try and explain the demonic abilities better or at least flesh out the changes that each of them has under gone. You have it so that they all kinda have the same gifts that are just lumped together. I also noticed that other then a brief mentioning you don't bring up the blood lines of any of them again. This is only a list of things that could be improved and I mean no offense keep up the good work.
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Reviewed By: chaosthesith89 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 03, 2007 01:13 CDT
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Awesome story, it has to be one of the best I have ever read. It really needs to keep going.
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Title: heh
Reviewed By: Aoidragon [MediaMiner Member] On: May 20, 2007 04:23 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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liked the new chapter, even though it was really short :p update as soon as you can alright?
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Reviewed By: J0kEr [MediaMiner Member] On: May 17, 2007 22:13 CDT
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College is way mor important than a story... you should concentrate on your school first.. chapter was cool.
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Reviewed By: nantukoprime On: May 17, 2007 03:00 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 4 of 10 Comment/Review:
If Krakens Ghost knew this fic existed and how much of this plot was taken from Foxhound, he'd have a fit (at least the prologue). I'm sorry, but just too many coincidences plot wise for it to not be taken from Foxhound.
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Reviewed By: Syrus Magistus [MediaMiner Member] On: March 31, 2007 18:03 CDT
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Actually, the eight tailed demon is Hachibi no Hachimata, aka Yamata no Orochi. Orochimaru is his human form, but eventually he is destroyed by Sasuke. He and Kyuubi are mortal enimies, except that Kyuubi is immortal. Yamata no Orochi has power that can equal Kyuubi's in quality granted to him by the Grass-cutter sword he swallowed once upon a time, but not quantity since Kyuubi has infinite chakra. The closest bijuu to a wolf is the Five tailed dog with white fur, Gobi no Houkou. Kyuubi translated to Ninetails. so the name Kyuuji would translate as "nine-blank" since "Ji" means nothing. The Two tails was already introduced as Nibi no Nekomta The giant two-tailed black cat sealed within Yugito of the lightning country.
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Title: guys
Reviewed By: rdsjr_1989(himself) On: January 13, 2007 02:27 CST
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i dont know who all reads these other than me (the author) but im writing a note to all my reviewers. thanks for the note and stuff....but im going to college and i have no time....and no fielord, it hasnt been 2 years sine i last updated....i dont think....i started in '06....but thts beside the point....il try to work at college now that i have a laptop....so please bear with me
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Title: 2 years!
Reviewed By: firelord [MediaMiner Member] On: January 12, 2007 23:40 CST
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it took two bloody years to update?! well i ges i cant complain at least maby now i will finly get to read the next chapter of this story so i beg you please update a.s.a.p
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Reviewed By: Crimson Reaver On: October 06, 2006 08:04 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm floored! It's just that good. Keep up the great work.
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Reviewed By: J0kEr [MediaMiner Member] On: September 01, 2006 17:15 CDT
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I love this Story. Please UPDATE SOON!!! CAN'T WAIT!!!
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Reviewed By: RyuDragontis [MediaMiner Member] On: August 24, 2006 23:59 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
awesome! i luv this ifc
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Title: Um....
Reviewed By: Specula [MediaMiner Member] On: August 21, 2006 21:38 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 4 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
More powerful than the Akatsuki members the day it was born... Righto. I can sort of see the baby being born and then looking at the Akatsuki leader and eveyone seeing him drop dead for apparently no reason... And no, I don't critisize others without having personal experience. *Looks at the six fics he has written/is currently writing* I mean come on, not even Kyuubi would have been that powerful the day it was born... Still the first chappie was good. I'll get to the others after this... I really do hope that Naruto doesn't suddenly gain the ability to make the universe self destruct with a single thought. Now THAT would be beyond acceptability standards...
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Reviewed By: firelord [MediaMiner Member] On: August 21, 2006 20:31 CDT
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another fantastic chapter but it was kind of short al well thanks for the update and please update agin a.s.a.p.
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Title: updates
Reviewed By: Crazy_Killa On: July 28, 2006 00:29 CDT
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need...update *crazy look in eyes* NOW!!! wow umm... i guess i kinda lost it there. its just that i really like the fic but it really needs to be updated. its becoming a habit just to look a the fic for any updates, then when i see there are none i read it anyway. well, anyways......ummm ya update soon please, please, please, pleeaaasssee!!!!! cccccc ya later
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