| "The night at hospital" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] |
Reviewed By: Tevin On: May 12, 2008 12:16 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 3 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
you really should try using space and paragraphs it became a little annoying to read it the way it was the stroy was good but i dont like th ending for me personally never end a story on a cliff hanger if you're not going to make a part two
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Reviewed By: silverquill-87 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 03, 2007 23:15 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
First try for a little spacing. Without completely flaming this fic, I'd just like to say that it needs work. I suggest going to aff.net and looking up some better written material. Lemons can be done in a much better way.
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Title: T.T
Reviewed By: Racky [MediaMiner Member] On: April 20, 2007 02:04 CDT
Comment/Review:
Wow. You should try it with definite storyline, though. I liked the beginning but the end seemed a little bit of a cliffhanfer. Well, ja!
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Title: =)
Reviewed By: Jophiel On: July 09, 2006 03:17 CDT
Comment/Review:
HI!!! ya know this is the first story in this category that is rated X. cool!well, see ya
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