| "Return To Innocence" Reviews/Comments [ 9 ] |
Reviewed By: gerardchick On: October 30, 2007 20:53 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
um.. i know its been along time sence you wrote this but its really good and it would be great if you could write more!!!
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Reviewed By: jacquleinestel On: February 01, 2007 09:10 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
How wonderfully declicious! I love this fic, and can't wait for the next chapter!
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Reviewed By: KenzPotter [MediaMiner Member] On: January 16, 2007 18:12 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! aww but it ended so suddenly i was mad. but pleeeeeaaaaaaassssseeeeeee keep writting!!!! im working on my first fruits basket fan fic. so if you keep writting it incourages me to keep writting. so keep up the good work!!!!!!1 ^_^
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Reviewed By: sakura-bell On: January 14, 2007 20:46 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Poor Yuki-kun! Who would do such a thing like that to lil kids. It not fair on them. I liked the story though. It was very moving and reminds us how lucky we are. Please continue writing this story to the best of your ability!
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Reviewed By: KenzPotter [MediaMiner Member] On: December 04, 2006 18:50 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really liked it!!!!!!!!! actually i loved it!!! please hurry and post the next chapter so i can read it!!! the story itself is very interesting. Please keep writting!!!! ^_^
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Title: Thank you for updating! *bows*
Reviewed By: Tohru819 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 02, 2006 00:18 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Pocky-Pocky-chan? Could it be you are the same Pocky-Pockey-chan from FF.net who inspired Winter's Light to update her fic, Discovered Talent? Yay! Thank you for that! And thank you for updating, I noticed quite a few typos but nothing that bad, I was still able to tell what you meant to write. Plus you said this was the un-bataed version so it's okay. ^_^ Aw, this chapter was as brilliant, and as heartbreaking as the last! All the characters are still totally IC, especially the ever adorable Tohru-kun and our dear Kyoko-san. Kyon-chan and Yun-chan's thoughts on their families and parents were positively heartbreaking! I love them both and I hate it when they blame themselves for things that aren't their fault. "Damn it all; if I ever meet the bitch who abandoned him, I'll kill her with my own bare hands," Hahaha, my sentiments exactly Kyoko-san, I hate Yun-chan's mother, she doesn't deserve Yun-chan or Aaya. So, please keep writing!
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Title: heart breaking
Reviewed By: demonXslayerXsango [MediaMiner Member] On: July 01, 2006 12:33 CDT
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this story was so sad, and not to mention so damn EMO. it broke my heart over and over. it stole my breath and for a moment i felt as if i could not breath. its feels so real, not to be weird but as i read it i felt as if i were that young boy out alone in the streets. it broke my heart to see or read how poor ,little yuki was all alone in the cold cold rain. but wow ur a very good writer. u catch the image of the story and the point of view. wow ur one of the best writers i have seen so far!. ^-^. your grammar is perfect very good. and not to mention how you describe the scene and how everything i going. wow im amazed. but in all who has the right mind to leave such a precious child behind like that out there to fend for himself. they must be heartless and downright stupid. but this story is great i love it! plz update soon ^-^ this fic is wonderful! i have to add ur fic to my favorites! i luved it. ^-^ ill wait for more chapters!
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Title: how cute! i love it!!
Reviewed By: demonXslayerXsango [MediaMiner Member] On: July 01, 2006 12:26 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
gasp! how sad! poor lil yuki! but i luv this story! plz UPDATE!! i beg of you!!! i must see what happends next!!!! Update soon!
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Reviewed By: Tohru819 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 30, 2006 17:49 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh, my, gosh. That was completely breath taking, heart breaking and absolutely beautiful. No, none of those words can do justice to this master piece of a fan fiction. No words can properly describe how extraordinary this story was or how amazingly talented you are. This fic is wonderfully descriptive, extremely touching, it has a brilliantly original plot and both Kyoko and Yun-chan are perfectly in character. Not to mention that you have remarkable grammar. From what I've read in this story I would have to say that your talent can rival that of Takaya-sensei herself. Kyoko is right; to abandon such an innocent young child is completely inhuman! Some people are so heartless and cruel. It's SO sad! I know that if I were in Kyoko's shoes I couldn't keep myself from hugging Yun-chan the minute I saw him! What a sad sight that would be. I love this fic so much and I will read and review every chapter from now on, no matter what! ^_^
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