| "The Demon's Blackmailed Bride" Reviews/Comments [ 82 ] |
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Reviewed By: Deathangel232 On: November 03, 2006 22:20 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
I must say this is a very interesting story you've written. Although I don't like the relationship that Inuyasha and Kagome have in this story and that fact that Inuyasha forced Kagome into marrying him just because of some money her family owes. I'm a little affend by this because marriage is a very sacred bond. Its a special bond between two people that love each other and respect one another and for Inuyasha to use such a sacred bond in order control Kagome is just sickening. Also in chapter four, the sexual contact was a rape not a lemon. Even though Kagomes might still have feelings for Inuyasha, she was still raped. You need to know the difference between lemon and rape for next time. I'm not trying to say that you story is "bad" or "you need to do this or that." You have every right to write this story the way you want too. Your doing very well and I encourage you to keep writing this story. I not trying to make you feel bad. I'm just telling you how I feel about the relationship between Inuyasha and Kagome. Other then that, your story is very good and I'm looking forward to you updating when you can.
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Reviewed By: goddesskagome213 On: November 03, 2006 21:33 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is such a excellent story. I'm shocked that Inuyasha would do something like that to poor kagome. I hope you update soon. I'm dying to know what happens next. Plz Plz update.
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Reviewed By: pls update On: September 20, 2006 16:49 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WHEN ARE U GONNA UPDATE THIS STORY I KNOW SCHOOL HAS STARTED FOR U, BUT SHOULDNT YOU HAVE SOME FREE TIME TO UPDATE?????
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Title: Heh
Reviewed By: ji-an [MediaMiner Member] On: September 18, 2006 04:09 EDT
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I'm sorry to say that I didn't review for as long as I did. By the time I finnally got to read your story like you asked me too (remeber what you wrote in your review for my story Desert Rose) it was weeks (or maybe months) till I finnally got the chanve to dit down and read. I really like the idea going here! I wonder where Inuyasha's and Kagome's relationship is going after thier wedding night. Oh, And i am SO happy about the pairings. Too many people put Kagome and Sesshoumaru together. I hate that!! ANYwaaay, love it! Can't wait for more.
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Reviewed By: Im_PHAT [MediaMiner Member] On: August 31, 2006 12:40 EDT
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omg please updateeee please?
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Reviewed By: amazedreader On: August 28, 2006 02:13 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
loved it please please pleaase update soon can't wait to read the next chapter
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Reviewed By: IC On: August 20, 2006 02:20 EDT
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awsome chappie
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Title: still Loving it
Reviewed By: AmonLover [MediaMiner Member] On: August 12, 2006 18:03 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very Very Nice I Feel For Inuyasha Poor Boy Kags is Being a Meanie but I Cant Really Blame the Girl , Well I Realy Enjoy where Your Going with This and Cant Wait For your Next Update Luck n Love -amonlover
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Title: Story
Reviewed By: MyNameisSusan On: August 12, 2006 17:30 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well I really like your story. It's pretty good. The only thing I don't like is their relationship. I know there was troubles in their past, but that doesn't mean that it has to be so forced. Husband and wife are equals, what they have is like she has no choice what so ever. Like she is stuck as his slave almost. That's thing only thing I have a problem with.
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Reviewed By: Silver Talons [MediaMiner Member] On: August 12, 2006 00:56 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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I'm still lovin it. I'm so happy your keeping them apart with conflicting plans and stubborness and all the rest, because most authors with this storyline would have them lovey dovey within 24 hours of their marriage which takes away from the reality of the story. I think that Inuyasha's personality is right for this situation even if others think he is "too hateful", those people just can't comprehend that he is putting on a facade to gain control of the situation. But why am I telling you about your own story I still love it and don't let reviewers change your characters and plot to fit their wants, if they want romanitc mush on the first page there are plenty other stories for them to solicit. Anyway, keep on keeping on and stick with your style lub, Talons
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Reviewed By: KK On: August 11, 2006 22:56 EDT
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I love it so much, please write more, I cant wait to find out where thyre going but make it somewhere no one would expect, no place like hawaii or some where in the caribean or cancun I think to many ppol go there make it somewhere unique sorry if I sound like Im takeing over the story Im kinda a control freak at times anyways good luck for next chappie I'll be waiting♥Kimiko.K♥
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Reviewed By: gripithard On: August 11, 2006 21:49 EDT
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You need to put a Non-consensual Sex warning in Chapter 4. When a woman is forced, it is rape. End of story. She may have been attracted to him, but when she said 'NO' and he did what he wanted without her consent, it became rape. It is not a lemon (romantic sex) if she didn't want it to happen, it is non-consensual sex or rape. The Mediaminer rules state that a warning must be added to the beginning of the chapter and/or the summary when rape or non-consensual sex scenes are included in the story. "Romantic Rape" is still rape.
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Reviewed By: ragingtoujikin On: August 11, 2006 21:29 EDT
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ahhh i love it
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Title: Chapter 1
Reviewed By: Dragon's Lover [MediaMiner Member] On: August 11, 2006 05:48 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Sleepy now, will write a better review later. . . So it appears you've taken Inuyasha's general Kagome-obsession and hard heart, then stretched it accordingly as it likely would have turned out over that much time and distance. I'm having trouble believing Inuyasha would pull tricks like that on Kagome, or that he would care enough about business to have that kind of money hanging around. Then again, this is an AU and weird things happen in AUs. . . Question 1: Is Inuyasha a full demon in this fic? Question 2: Is Sango, Miroku, and/or Shippou in this fic? Question 3: If Mr. Higurashi is still alive in this fic, would that mean Kagome would have more than just one little brother? Question 4: Is Kagome 32, too? I imagine not. You don't have to answer these directly to me; add them in the fic (if you haven't already) and I'll read it eventually. Strangely, this fic bears a striking resemblence to a romance novel I once read, set in the 1800s. Storyline there basically went, Raphael didn't want a woman in his life after witnessing his mother cheating on his father, leaving, and then his father drinking himself to death, but Raph really wanted kids. In the end, he put a beautiful, strong woman by the name of Brandy into debt in a poker game, which he knew she couldn't afford. The deal was, she would marry him and bear a child. In doing so, he would release her from debt and marriage, and he would keep the child. Along the way, however, they fell in love -- through hot, steamy sex and a burning desire that neither could deny. Naturally, happy ending followed.
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Reviewed By: Laurachan On: August 10, 2006 17:47 EDT
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Really interesting and fascinating... I hope to read more soon! :)
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