| "The Band" Reviews/Comments [ 6 ] |
Reviewed By: yeahsurewhateverrr [MediaMiner Member] On: November 22, 2006 01:54 CST
Comment/Review:
hoping for more complex sentences. just kinda hoping ...
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Reviewed By: MDG07 (not signed in) On: November 21, 2006 20:34 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 3 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 3 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 3 of 10 Comment/Review:
I dont mean to be rude, but your fanfic is seriously lacking. It is very hard to understand with all the grammatical errors and time changes. I feel like your story doesnt make all that much sense, one minute we are in a modeling studio and in the next scene we talking about when Inuyasha was 11. Another fact that just kills me is that Inuyasha doesnt even know what a date is, much less sex. I think thats a little too far out especially for an 'X' rated fanfiction. I think it could be a good story if you got a beta and maybe used a little more plot verses scattered memories and jumbled thoughts. These are just some suggestions; they're yours to take or leave. good luck.
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Title: love it
Reviewed By: airy On: July 24, 2006 17:41 CDT
Comment/Review:
3 WORDS I LOVE IT
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Title: Musics not your thing
Reviewed By: Kiki33 On: July 20, 2006 16:18 CDT
Comment/Review:
Ok no offense meant, but your songs suck. But your still a great author. I just don't think music is your thing. Honest critisism, Kiki33
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Reviewed By: Camria On: July 10, 2006 16:14 CDT
Comment/Review:
Another band fic? There are way too many of these as it is. Try pushing the envelope and being more original. That might be a challenge for you because it would mean no more band, high school, or Beauty and Beast fics or any other Fairy tale adapted to Inuyasha.
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Title: It's good
Reviewed By: anime fanlover [MediaMiner Member] On: July 10, 2006 15:12 CDT
Comment/Review:
Hello!! I like this fanfic. It's a shame that it only has one chapter... It can get good!!! Please update
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