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| "Ranma's 3rd Law" Reviews/Comments [ 7 ] | Title: Good Story
Reviewed By: crolynx [MediaMiner Member] On: May 02, 2007 14:49 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I thought you did a very good job. You presented a much used story in a different way. And it's very refreshing. Eagerly awaiting the next chapter, Crolynx ;p
| Title: More Please
Reviewed By: Nysk [MediaMiner Member] On: April 05, 2007 00:15 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Excellent story, I do hope that there will be more of this sometime soon.
| Reviewed By: OSAT On: April 04, 2007 08:01 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
This is Good. More Please.
| Title: ranma's 3rd law
Reviewed By: blackice [MediaMiner Member] On: April 03, 2007 20:17 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
it is a good story to read and wonder what happens when ranma wakes up at the outers house.
| Reviewed By: DrewB1442 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 02, 2007 16:08 CDT
Comment/Review:
People are pretty much IC, however, you need to work on your paragraphs a little. All in all, a good story.
| Reviewed By: Saekochan (not logged in) On: April 01, 2007 03:02 CDT
Comment/Review:
Dunno how Ranma can know Usagi from Junior High, when it was an ALL BOYS school and she went to JH with the girls in the beginning of the series. Also, you seriously, seriously need to work on the way your sentences run on and on until the reader gets lost. I had to reread almost half of the things in the story. Didn't see any typos, I dont think, but like I said, sentence structure please! I do like the thoughts of him finally leaving the Tendo family, and how you've got Kasumi being smart. But Nodoka already knew about the Neko-ken by the end of the series, I think, and Akane isn't all that abusive toward the end, either. And saying that Setsuna, the second most mistrustful (the first is Haruka, but she's not supposed to trust easily) Senshi, and the only one with the ability to look into their past, wouldnt immediately look at his past when she first heard of him, is ridiculous. Its less likely than America finally bringing the Stars season here in English! Don't get me wrong, this is not random flamage. I do like the idea and would very much enjoy reading more. But work on your mistakes before going any further, because if you dont fix them now when you're still at the beginning of the story, you won't want to go back later to fix them. Trust me.
| Reviewed By: Saekochan [MediaMiner Member] On: July 23, 2006 00:58 CDT
Comment/Review:
Learn your grammar and paragraph style, and get the characters in character, and you will have something thats a lot better than what it is now.
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