| "Demonic Immolation" Reviews/Comments [ 10 ] |
Reviewed By: naruharemlover [MediaMiner Member] On: February 17, 2009 14:36 CST
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i have only read the first chapter but i like the bloody scenes so can you maybe send the depht of the fight to me plz couse i just love the blood scenes
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Title: meishere!
Reviewed By: swordfightergirl [MediaMiner Member] On: March 10, 2008 16:51 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow >.> evil but...i like it xD i think that naruto is a little too powerful, but his motives make the situation a little different. and i like his outfit btw. xD
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Reviewed By: shinichi [MediaMiner Member] On: May 31, 2007 17:34 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
the grammar´s not great, but understandable, so i´m totaly ok with it that he is only/too evil, can´t say i agree, since shino and kurenai seem to get along with him rather good (even though they´re afraid) the overall impression of him isn´t realy that of someone pure evil but please update
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Title: Yare, yare...
Reviewed By: Okami_Kitakazeno [MediaMiner Member] On: April 09, 2007 17:53 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 3 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 4 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 2 of 10
Overall Rating: 3 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm afraid I have to agree with Kanto The Slayer on this. You've got a good idea going here, and it shows that you've got it in your head. Now you just need to type it out in a coherent manner. Try running your chapters through a word processor before submission, saves time, but a program can't beat a person proofreader! As a side note, I have marked this fic out of interest. So keep on keepin' on and I'll keep reading. ~Okami
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Title: Hmm...
Reviewed By: Kanto The Slayer [MediaMiner Member] On: December 04, 2006 19:34 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 2 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 2 of 10
Overall Rating: 3 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hoo. Okay dude, I'm going to try and be as tactful as I can here. Your story, as far as I can see, has three problems. First is grammar. I mean seriously, you could use just a bit more of that. I don't know if this is your first story or not, but you need to pay attention to what and how you're writing. Second is your writing style. An evil Naruto is a good thing, but there's such a thing as too much evil. Even a villain has his good points, especially if he's the main character. You've made him too insidious, and while I agree his background is not the warm and fluffy type, give the guy a break when you make him go dark. Me? I like the anti-hero spin on things. Finally, your creativity. An original idea? Nah. Been done before, but that's not the point. People have turned the original into the exeptional before. It's your wording, your descriptions, and your scenes. They all end up the same way... and that does not a good read make. Conclusion?
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Reviewed By: Comechatcha [MediaMiner Member] On: November 06, 2006 02:35 CST
Comment/Review:
It's an interesting fic, but you do know that Haku is male, right?
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Title: Nifty
Reviewed By: shinji_the_good_sharer [MediaMiner Member] On: October 30, 2006 10:37 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Nice!!!! This is a REALLY good job on an old idea. I look forward to seeing more soon. I also hope to seeing Sasuke get smacked around. LOL!!!
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Reviewed By: randomlessness [MediaMiner Member] On: July 29, 2006 17:47 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 3 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 3 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow. This is a terrible fic. Do the world a favor and stop writing.
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Reviewed By: Bloodbrother [MediaMiner Member] On: July 18, 2006 20:50 CDT
Comment/Review:
i realy like it its interesting
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Reviewed By: The Judge [MediaMiner Member] On: July 17, 2006 23:28 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was awesome. Keep the chapters rolling.
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