| "Final Fantasy: Dark" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] |
Reviewed By: Yakasha On: October 19, 2002 00:16 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
Allo and Good Morning
Now I have a couple of words to say about this particular piece. It was a good an enjoyable fan fiction. I cannot wait till chapter 2 comes out I hate you for putting a teaser up there. I did think that you could describe the characters a bit more I and did like how you described their relationship to one another. Thats sort of what kept me going. Well Anyhow those are my Ramblings |
Reviewed By: Tidal On: October 18, 2002 23:29 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
The characters choosen are nice and varied in personality which create nice interactions between them. In introducing them, you managed to describe them pretty well. Though (since I am a description greedy person), I think maybe a more in depth description could be added somewhere along the story, so that the audience can clearly destinguish and grow attached to each of your characters. Characters are what make the story and making them feel real is perhaps the most enjoyable aspect of reading. You did build suspense at the end which got my curiousity going! I also like the comedy involved. There are some sentences you may be able to phrase better or in a more precise manner. Overall, it's a good start and I can't wait for chapter 2. =) |
Reviewed By: Cleoweo On: July 16, 2002 11:25 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
The plot line allows room for a well-developed story. The intro you've done is good for keeping your readers interested. However, the spelling errors are a bad distraction from the story. Also, it tends to be wordy at times. But I think the story has great potential and with a little cleaning up, would make a very enjoyable read. |
Reviewed By: sasami [MediaMiner Member] On: April 16, 2002 20:54 CDT
Comment/Review:
I told you that the ending was pretty bad. I'm still changing it a bit. I should have it completed by this weekend (April 21, 2002) Let me know what you think. I love feedback. |
