| "Fallout" Reviews/Comments [ 12 ] |
Reviewed By: Hoping for a new chapter On: March 26, 2011 22:49 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I remember reading this fic when it first came out years ago and every couple of months I check in here to see I you added a new chapter and always leave dissapointed. I really enjoy this story and can only image you're suffering massive writers block or that pesky thing called life is getting in the way, just know that whenever you get back to finishing this ( if ever ), know that someone out there is still eagerly anticipating a new chapter!!! Good job on the story!!! hope to read more of your work |
Reviewed By: BlitzballChamp On: March 17, 2008 17:26 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
To put it simply, this is the best fanfiction I have ever read. It takes a new spin on an old (and overly used) idea and actually shows the ramifications if Keitaro would actually be romantically involved with all of the Hinata girls. While you haven't updated in a year or so, you have done a brilliant job with this story as written and I can't help but appreciate it.
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Title: very nice
Reviewed By: monkeyman1 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 26, 2007 07:50 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this one of the best fanfic also great white hunter was good but i wish you could update soon i wish grandmother hina thinks of advice she said shed give on the get together part and i also wish there was a twist that they would end up all together and be sister wives and all with equal love and one husband.... just trying to make a suggestion though ^_^ please don't think wrongly that i am not satisfied... and if they end that way they would be more accepting and with no jealousy because i really hat them gonna go separate ways though...... again i really enjoyed this fic once i started reading it i read it until the last chapter.... i wish you update soon
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Reviewed By: Glaedr [MediaMiner Member] On: April 04, 2007 02:40 EDT
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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Great story so far, hope you finish it. Besides the story and how good you are at writing it, I'm pretty surprised at how few typos there are, as even the really good FanFics I've read have had alot, good job.
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Reviewed By: Tezza1502 On: December 09, 2006 11:13 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Howdy! Just read this and the preceeding story (Great White Hunter Keitaro) all at once. Damn fine job, IMHO. There are a few fics out there about Kei nailing some or all of the tennants, but none have followed up on the consiquences to quite this degree. I am frankly amazed that you have managed to keep it all straight in your head, much less weave it all into a coherent and smoothly-flowing story. You have some major talent! Hope you find it within yourself to conclude this, and not leave it to languish unfinished. I am damn curious to see how this pans out. Eagerly awaiting the next chapter. T p.s.: Would it be possible for you to do a headcount of all the little Urashima ankle-biters running about? I still can't get a clear idea of just how many are around.
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Reviewed By: skulLXeon On: November 11, 2006 03:51 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow... you actually made me feel sad at the end of chapter 6... :( good story though... i really enjoyed reading the other fic before this one... :D Adios for now... and hope you update soon...'
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Reviewed By: skinkfem On: October 28, 2006 08:25 EDT
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just finished reading chapter 6 and i love it. ive never stumbled on a bad fic involving children of the lh characters and much less anyone this good. my only complaint is that you left out ema maeda since this if more or less a post series fanfic. unlike sara i would love to see her in the harem as well as kanako and possibly mei if she get more screen time. actually i would like to see more mei wether she joins the harem or not, shes such an unused character. anyway im eagerly awaiting next installment of this addictive fic.
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Reviewed By: Innortal [MediaMiner Member] On: October 27, 2006 04:38 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Aside from always being in italics, it was very good.
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Title: Nice
Reviewed By: XoreandoX [MediaMiner Member] On: August 29, 2006 15:38 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good story so far hope you can update soon and i also have read great white hunter keitaro but now im wondering wat the main plot for this story could be hmmmm
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Reviewed By: DB Waffles On: August 21, 2006 18:52 EDT
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Grandma hina is a jerk sometimes, good chapter but i think if the kids were that young and their mommys were crying and fighting they would cry too and no be so cheery, but good ch
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Reviewed By: DB Waffles On: August 14, 2006 18:04 EDT
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Very good but it seems alot of details are missing, and some of the grandkids and the ammount of them started to confuse me ^_^;
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Reviewed By: The Judge [MediaMiner Member] On: August 13, 2006 22:48 EDT
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the way some of the girls are acting, something tells that this one is goin to be very bad for keitaro in more than one way.
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