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| "A SHINTO PRIESTESS IN THE ANCIEN HITTITE EMPIRE" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] | Title: Not very original
Reviewed By: JessJess On: November 02, 2011 02:22 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your style of writing is enjoyable. Grammar is very good. But you really lack originality --you basically follow the EXACT plot of the manga. You simply switched Yuri's name out.Even the dialogues are the same!! This is fanfiction, so please exercise some more obvious changes. I am not saying that there are not changes--there are and I have noticed them, but there aren't enough for me to really enjoy it as a FANFICTION. Your original character is well done. I like her. May I remark on your excessive use of "Stupid, Stupid!!"? It's getting awfully repetitive... I will start to think that they really are Stupid. Please....please...diverge from the main plot a bit more... | Reviewed By: ToDifferentToBeReal [MediaMiner Member] On: May 11, 2007 15:28 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 2 of 10 Comment/Review:
Honestly, I don't like it. All you've done it replaced Yuri with your character, not very original. Personally, I don't really like OC/Main character pairings, I think they are very cliche and (not to be insulting) stupid. I always go by the book and stick with canon pairings, also I liked Yuri so a Red River fanfiction with her taken out isn't to my tastes. The beginning was good but the rest is just the manga written out with Yuri replaced with your characters, so I know pretty much how the story ends seeing as I've read raws of Red River. Spelling and grammer was good but the rest not so much.
| Reviewed By: kane-sakura [MediaMiner Member] On: February 13, 2007 20:31 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
I can't say I love this story...the beginning was good since it was different than the book "Red River", but taking your character and inserting her as the main character and rewriting it isn't very creative. I might've taken the setting and made new characters and mingled Kail Yuri in there somewhere. Completely replacing Yuri is not a creative, and it makes a boring and very predictable read, especially for someone who knows the "Red Rvier" series very well. And the thoughts are very scattered. I know you were intending to write it like the manga, but with a manga you have pictures that makes the story make sense. What I did like was the fact that you didn't have a lot of spelling or grammar errors. That makes it easier.
| Reviewed By: Inu Toy On: October 14, 2006 13:53 EDT
Comment/Review:
I so hope you guys know that I'm the one who asked the people on the site to add Red River, I think I did it about ten times and now they finally put it up... Anyway, I don't like OOSCs and this is too much like the books, it's more like your taking the idea and adding your character
| Reviewed By: NUNICHAN On: August 24, 2006 00:35 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Thank You!!! about time sombody wrote a Red River fic, personally i like Yuri as the main character but this was good. Update soon I'm interested in seeing how you develop this fic.
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