| "The Final Chance" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] |
Title: FFRG Review
Reviewed By: Kari Izumi [MediaMiner Member] On: October 07, 2006 02:21 CDT
Comment/Review:
Hi! :) To be honest, original fiction is not something I've read much of. But I have to say you did a pretty good job of developing your characters in this story. I only read through Chapter Two, but the pacing is excellent so far. Nothing too fast or too slow as far as overall plot goes. However, I feel that the very first mention of Ryleigh's trances in chapter two could use for a little bit more description It's good that you're not waiting a long time to get to the main plot of the story, but something that big could use with a little more detail from Ryleigh's POV. Character-wise, I liked Nathaniel's entrance in chapter one, as well as Ryleigh's art teacher. This is overall a nice story. Good job.
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Title: Prologue
Reviewed By: Silver Armada [MediaMiner Member] On: September 01, 2006 22:38 CDT
Comment/Review:
Wow. I know almost nothing about the characters Preia and Rye, mostly because I never read your RP (>_>;), but wow. That was a really bold way to start off the fic. I'm REALLY intrigued and will be following this now along with your art. :D
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Title: A New Destiny
Reviewed By: angelfire777 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 23, 2006 01:40 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I just wanted to let you know that I so love the couple Preia and Rye. Their story is very original and refreshing. I am hooked! Take care of you.
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