| "All That Time Allows" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] |
Reviewed By: kokoronagomu [MediaMiner Member] On: December 01, 2008 11:48 CST
Comment/Review:
very interesting sensual story. one thing though~ the egg matures and ovulation occurs (woman is fertile or animal is in 'heat') and the uterus lining fills with blood. then if the egg is not fertilized it is passed at menstruation/period along with the blood that lines the uterus. i think you were describing her period (messy sex) and not ovulation which happens about a week or more before bleeding.
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Reviewed By: unistar [MediaMiner Member] On: October 01, 2007 20:27 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
nice story... enjoyed reading it... good job... great work...
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Reviewed By: appelcline [MediaMiner Member] On: November 15, 2006 22:16 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I found the numerous spelling mistakes very distracting (including the repeated use of "loose" instead of "lose"), but otherwise I enjoyed the fic quite a bit. I particularly liked the first chapter, since the sexual tension between IY and Kagome was most interesting and amusing to me there. I'm normally not fond of stories that primarily take place after the romantic tension (the exchange of "I love you"s) has been resolved, but I liked how you maintained the tension through the miko/youkai problem.
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Reviewed By: kyonkichi-luver [MediaMiner Member] On: September 01, 2006 20:21 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your fic is very good, I cracked up on all the interrupted moments. It's really good.
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Reviewed By: loulou4729 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 29, 2006 23:51 CDT
Comment/Review:
I really would not mind reading you story, but it's all clumped together in one long sentence. If you edit the story; I'll probably come back to read it. Not flaming you or anything, it's just that when people see stories posted like that, they tend to not even take the time to read it...
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