| "Lemon Sorbet" Reviews/Comments [ 9 ] |
Reviewed By: yeahsurewhateverrr [MediaMiner Member] On: November 26, 2006 02:54 CST
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that was an amazing lemon. you write it like a pro (:
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Title: WOW!
Reviewed By: CanineKagome [MediaMiner Member] On: November 26, 2006 00:46 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm surprised for ur first lemon that was amazing.
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Reviewed By: Shippo_Dude On: November 25, 2006 23:02 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this is great I almost always skip to the good part but I didn't and thats saying something I hope you keep righting theas P.S my fav parring is shipo/kirara always looking never finding :(
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Reviewed By: Chibes [MediaMiner Member] On: November 23, 2006 15:52 CST
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Inuyasha jumped out of the well house and hopped onto Kagome's window. (a/n I just thought of something. In the series, in modern day the well is in the well house in the shrine, which is on top of the hill right? In the past, it's in the forest, which is not on the hill. How does that work?) She sat him so hard it reshaped the japanese landscape...
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Reviewed By: Vincent75angel On: November 15, 2006 08:05 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You did very well.
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Reviewed By: kagomegirl2004 On: October 27, 2006 23:13 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
^^ GREAT. Actually, the well IS on a hill... ever notice that in the first episode how Kagome had to run up a hill to escape Mistress Centipede? same hill that the steps are on in her time. The shrine was re-built. They do that a lot to old buildings... settling soil (example: The leaning Tower of Piza was built on sand, which is settlign and causing one side to sink slightly) happens to more old buildings, and even new ones... that's my explanation why the shrine didn't just stay in one place, anyways...
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Reviewed By: ladygeri [MediaMiner Member] On: October 14, 2006 13:24 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very nice and tastefullly done. I definately wouldn't mind if the story continued. Especially for a certain hentai monk and stressed out demon-slayer...lol.
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Reviewed By: XxSangoxX [MediaMiner Member] On: October 14, 2006 04:26 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
who the fuck taught you how to write? this is terrible. jk i LOVED this. I just felt kind of ... enticed to tell you it sucked cuz you said not to. HAHA they came home when kags and he were finishing. You should write more to this. People like hentai .. I write it too.. though i have one story up on here i have MANY on Adultfanfiction.net under the name XxSangoxX you should read them. just so you know, she said sit twice. Anytime she says sit... no matter WHAT the context, he plummets. In the third movie I believe... she says it while they are walking for some reason just saying 'I'm sorry i sit you all the time' or something and he falls. just thought that bout of knowledge would be good for future reference. I need to go to sleep now, so I hope this much of a review will suffice. WRITE MORE.
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Reviewed By: Anime Lady PIMP [MediaMiner Member] On: September 05, 2006 15:41 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
LOL! I like it! Keep it! ^_^ That was ur first lemon?
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