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| "Destiny" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Title: FFRG Review
Reviewed By: Kari Izumi [MediaMiner Member] On: October 07, 2006 02:51 CDT
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Wow, I have to say that this is one of the best original fics I've come across. I don't read very much because of the usualy probelms of generic plot, Mary Sue, ect., but through the two chapters I've read and will review on, you've pretty much avoided that. The flow of the story, as well as the descriptions, are absolutely beautiful. There wasn't a lot of needless description as many fics tend to have, and that's a good thing. The mysterious tone of fic was great...you can already sense Gwen's apprihension about lying to her fiancee (A harbinger of things to come?) Overall, a strong piece of work. The biggest thing I noticed were the easy grammar mistakes that got by-there were a few places, particularly in the first chapter, of dropped periods at the end of a sentence and misplaced or missing commas. It was better in chapter two, but still a few places where it could be fixed. Grammar aside, this was a very, very outstanding piece of work, and I am glad to have read this.
| Reviewed By: Dark Lord Tokunaga [MediaMiner Member] On: September 29, 2006 18:50 CDT
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okay, i've only read the first chapter, and it's a really good story.... so you made the characters up your self? it's a good fic, with a lot of details... now to go and read the other chapters..... =p hope you'll R&R mine... well, technacely, i have only one fic, but the rest are poems...
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