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| "The Sohma Story" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Reviewed By: Tohru819 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 12, 2006 12:25 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Let's see, I noticed a few mistakes, like a lot of the time when I think you meant to put "Too" you put "To" instead. Also I agree with what Spike26-san, it is a little hard to read. Other than that I really like it! Except that A-chan died, poor A-chan. But I'm happy that Yun-chan is still alive. ^_^ Keep writing! I'm looking forward to the next chapter!
| Reviewed By: Spike631 On: October 20, 2006 08:08 CDT
Comment/Review:
My first advice to you is this: Go back and put in hard returns so we can tell when one character stops talking and another one begins. It's too difficult to read when all your dialogue runs together in a big lumpy paragraph! Otherwise, you do seem to have an excellent grasp of the characters. I'll be very interested to see where you go with this story. Keep writing!
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