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| "Conceived In Darkness" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] | Title: Author's note
Reviewed By: PrettySephy [MediaMiner Member] On: November 30, 2006 22:01 CST
Comment/Review:
I wasn't originally sure whether or not to make it an mpreg, but after considering all possible character reactions (especially Jack Sparrow's), it decided it would be fun.
| Title: Chapters 1-2
Reviewed By: HopelesslyEscaflowne [MediaMiner Member] On: November 19, 2006 21:21 CST
Comment/Review:
Well, you have the beginning going, it'll be interesting to see what actually happens and how Riku actually escaped. Not to mention why Maleficent wants his child in particular or whatever happened to Kairi. So this is an AU post-KH2 fic?? Wow, does that mean that since Riku hinted at the fact that he's stuck in Jack Sparrow's world that a lot of the fic will happen there? Will there still be world hopping?? I mean, obviously Sora has to meet up with him somehow but I was wondering if you're going through a lot of worlds or just a few. It would be great if your chapters had more content. ^^ Fleshing them out a little would really add to the story. More description couldn't hurt either. ;) I'm curious what'll happen next. Btw, since the story started with a whole pregnancy thing with Maleficent, will your story have MPREG too? I personally am a fan of mpreg but it's ok if there isn't any. Well, take care and I'll look out for your next chapter.
| Reviewed By: harus_cowgirl [MediaMiner Member] On: October 26, 2006 09:36 CDT
Comment/Review:
^-^ that makes more sense. you should put that at the beginging of the chapter.
| Reviewed By: PrettySephy [MediaMiner Member] On: October 25, 2006 23:48 CDT
Comment/Review:
Actually, it takes place in an alternate universe after KH2. I was going to put that in the genre selection, but we're only allowed to select three.
| Reviewed By: harus_cowgirl [MediaMiner Member] On: October 25, 2006 21:45 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a good story. I hope that you update soon. I think that it is unique, but could use some improvements. Since this seems to mostly take place in KH1, but you throw in stuff from KHCOM and KH2... you should clarify that a bit...
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