| "E-Hero" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] |
Reviewed By: bumstott [MediaMiner Member] On: February 16, 2007 18:03 CST
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Excellent if i do ay so myself you know who this is right? Bumstott B - Umstott Yeah!
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Reviewed By: Nooblet [MediaMiner Member] On: February 06, 2007 19:24 CST
Comment/Review:
pretty good but why is it that the Destinies haven't been shown yet
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Reviewed By: maatkare [MediaMiner Member] On: November 30, 2006 21:52 CST
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Your second chapter is much better. But another little advice: in your original document, press enter between the paragraphs in your original document to create a space between the paragraphs. This makes the story more easier to read. =](I don't know if you are aware of this, but the way a story appears in whatever word processor you use doesn't always appear in the same way when the story is uploaded. In other words, the indent/tab key is useless. I made this mistake one too many times before and, trust me, it drove a lot of my viewers crazy trying to figure out where one paragraph began and another one ended).
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Reviewed By: maatkare [MediaMiner Member] On: November 21, 2006 22:12 CST
Comment/Review:
Here's a little constructive crticism: In my opinion, I think you need to change the format you're writing in. Most readers want to see detail and descriptive writing rather than dialogue. I would suggest that the story be written in story format as opposed to play format.
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