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Title: to Volcanic
Reviewed By: Cantare [MediaMiner Member] On: June 13, 2007 19:40 CDT
Comment/Review:
Hey Volcanic, I just wanted to let you know I'm thankful you're still keeping up with this story. I am working on the next chapter; I have a rough draft and I am revising it right now. If you want to talk more over email, that would be great!
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Title: Best Fanfic EVER
Reviewed By: Volcanic On: June 03, 2007 02:22 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really love your writing! Everyday I check to see if you've updated and when you have I'm extatic. I love the Piccolo parts the most!
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Title: Great job!!!
Reviewed By: Androidgirl18 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 27, 2007 19:49 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this story.It's so exciting.I'm not such a big fan of Vegeta but now I am because of your story!!!Great Job!!!
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Reviewed By: Paper. On: April 24, 2007 18:57 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm loving it. I think this is beautifully written. All the characters are perfect, Vegeta's musings of his past, even the way his thoughts are so articulate; I genuinely believe that this is exactly how the characters would think and feel (should they be real lol). I love a story where you genuinely loose your self in it, and despite the fact that Gohan, 18, and Piccolo are characters who have never particularly interested me, you still had me hanging off every word. You have a great talent. The only criticism I would give is that the summary does not give it justice. Please keep up the good work xxx
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Reviewed By: LW On: March 27, 2007 00:19 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Okay, now THIS is quite a gem! I don't even know where to start, the direction of the story is very original, you keep everyone in character (I actually found myself laughing and clapping everytime you "hit the nail on the head" THAT I have never done XD)I must say that I'm very glad I sifted through the overdone and mundane and came across your fic! Ahh.. the sweet smell of incoming fanart. toodles.
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Title: Highly Intriguing
Reviewed By: LupinGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: February 07, 2007 12:26 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
So far, I'm intrigued with the direction this story is going in. Your writing style has that rare and effective quality of roping its readers in, leading them into the story and keeping them wondering what will happen next. I find myself contemplating on just who the "priest" is: Judging from what Piccolo and Dende had sensed at Kami's tower, the entity seemed to be jumping between planes. Someone long dead from Vegeta's past? That would also explain how the priest knew so much about him. Was it coincidence or foreshadowing that Vegeta had thought to himself that "his father was dead" when the priest referred to him as "son"? I was very happy to see that the latest update was a recent one: Typically when a story hasn't been updated for a year or more it can be assumed that the author abandoned it. I'm looking forward to the next chapter! A highly engrossing fic so far.
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Reviewed By: Volcanic On: November 12, 2006 20:58 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow that was really great! I can't wait to read more!
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Title: Wow!
Reviewed By: Kieri [MediaMiner Member] On: November 02, 2006 12:26 CST
Comment/Review:
Your summary is what drew me to this fic: even though it was vague I found it well written and intriguing. I never expected to find a "confession" piece! I'm not Catholic so I'm not certain how a confession works, but the wordplay between Vegeta and the priest had just the right amount of detail. There was enough to let you picture the scene and Vegeta's emotions without being overly angsty, which would have slowed down the pacing. My only complaint is the description "thin slab" -- slab is usually associated with a sheet of granite, stone or something thick and heavy. This may be worded a little better so it doesn't stumble. I had a feeling the priest (was there really just one? A mystery!) was more than he appeared, and I'm very interested to find out where this story goes!
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