| "Sailor Moon H Legend of the moon shinobi" Reviews/Comments [ 97 ] |
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Reviewed By: princessofdobermans(nsi) On: May 14, 2008 23:13 CDT
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i love it please update soon, you still need some work with proper quote usage and paragraphs, spelling and proper grammar but you are making a dramatic improvement from start to where you are now . and a little advice when you use Chan, Kun, san, sama(lord/lady) use the - with is, and Koi(girlfriend) and Koshi(boyfriend), father is Otou-san, Otou-chan(daddy), ka-chan(momma), Okka-san(mother), Oba-san(grandma), Obaa-san(aunt). so there is a few more words and meanings for you for some of the words you use a lot in English but with the theme you are going with switch it to Japanese and dong forget the space then the -. i hope you update soon Dobie
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Reviewed By: Taeniaea [MediaMiner Member] On: April 23, 2008 12:43 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great Story
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Reviewed By: Taeniaea [MediaMiner Member] On: April 23, 2008 12:41 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great Story!!
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Reviewed By: Taeniaea [MediaMiner Member] On: April 02, 2008 19:36 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great Story!
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Reviewed By: dragoonvixenofshadows [MediaMiner Member] On: March 11, 2008 15:37 CDT
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please use quotation marks in the story so we readers know when the charicters are speaking. and indent when a person does start to speak and for a new person speaking, so we know who and when the dialogue belongs and when it started, other than that its really good so far. right now im on chapter 2 and the quote thing was really annoying me. vixen
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Title: About the next chapter
Reviewed By: Gravenimage [MediaMiner Member] On: February 11, 2008 14:53 CST
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Al right people Im a little undecided about writting the next chapter I have been thinking in making the chunin exams I might write a three part saga BUT I also have been thinking in skipping the chunin exams and beginning with the first time skip of the story I don't know what to do I need your opinions.
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Title: Dango!
Reviewed By: Sukrai On: January 18, 2008 17:02 CST
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The name of the food is Dango! Dango with Red Bean sauce! And usually she has sake or tea with it, depending on if she's on duty or with company...
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Reviewed By: Taeniaea [MediaMiner Member] On: January 04, 2008 08:06 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great chapter
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Title: MERRY CHRISTMAS
Reviewed By: Gravenimage [MediaMiner Member] On: December 24, 2007 23:39 CST
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All I have to say is.......MERRY CHRISTMAS TO ALL OF YOU AND A HAPPY NEW YEAR and dont worry I will continue writting fan fics so believe it.
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Title: Supremely awesome yet again.
Reviewed By: lord fox On: December 06, 2007 22:53 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
As usual great job. I'm glad to see that the small lady is in it. And boy oh boy was it a surprise when she used some of Naruto's moves. I am curious though if the demon doesn't break free Will you merge him with Naruto I've read stories were they've done that and makes Naruto a lot stronger. And I think I know what you're planning for our fire warriors but I'll keep to myself. I'm also glad to see two of the sand siblings there. Now all their missing is the much cooler one Gaara rules.
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Title: About Rei and Sasuke
Reviewed By: Gravenimage [MediaMiner Member] On: November 30, 2007 22:44 CST
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Thanks for the suggestion I do think Rei and Sasuke make a cute people but unfortunately that's not gonna happen sorry I need Sasuke with Sakura because I like it the same with Naru/Saku but anyway as for Rei and Sasuke I have something very shocking about them in future chapters you guys wont believe for what I have in store for the two but I will give you guys a hint its nothing romantic but you guys wont believe it its something shocking so sorry for leaving you guys hanging so keep reviewing because the story is gonna get better believe it.
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Reviewed By: rei hino [MediaMiner Member] On: November 30, 2007 20:27 CST
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i don't know if u read ur reviews or anything but if u do well thats good. anyways i think that (i know, this is very surprising) sasuke should be with rei hino. u don't have to put it in ur story if u want to but i think it would be very funny. i think the couple is cute but hilarious at the same time. i mean, c'mon, a story isn't interesting without sasuke going out with someone different. to tell u the truth, i'm starting to get tired of those sasusaku fanfics and amvs because there are so many of them and it's always the same thing every time. he falls in love with her and she falls in love with him. i mean, sasuke can never fall in love with sakura because sakura's love is selfish. even the creator of Naruto said it himself. She just wants him because every other girl wants him. i'm very sorry for being rude, this is just an opinion. actually, i'm not good at writing stories so yeah, well, anyways. i like ur story, it's getting good.
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Reviewed By: Taeniaea [MediaMiner Member] On: November 26, 2007 16:00 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great Story!!
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Reviewed By: Split On: November 08, 2007 16:56 CST
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Split up your paragraphs. Some of them are way too long which makes it difficult for people to read.
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Reviewed By: Sukrai On: October 27, 2007 19:58 CDT
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Yes, you should link part 2 to this story... or at least leave an author's note after the last chapter pointing to it. I like how you made Usagi the one who convinced Naruto to go back, that was something that both she would do and yet you don't expect it! Good job!
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