| "Fun and Games" Reviews/Comments [ 15 ] |
Reviewed By: Aoidragon [MediaMiner Member] On: June 30, 2007 00:59 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
way to go! ^^ i 'specially like the AN stuffs at the beginning and end :P and you forgot to define some of the words the last few chapters ; ; "ok, there's a word i don't know, lets go down to the bottom and see... what!?!? it's not here!?!?!" and i was too lazy to pull up a dictionary so im still wondering!!!! ; ; /cry but y'know i kinda wanna know how this all turns out :3 it's awesome!!!
|
Reviewed By: darkmistress in the shadows [MediaMiner Member] On: May 23, 2007 16:46 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Comment/Review:
Hold up…Katara and Aang? I love the pairing, but what happened to Zuko? Poor, poor, guy. (I'm sympathizing a rapist, now I know I need a life…) But still, Zuko said he loved her no more. That's so sad. I'm telling you, if you don't start on this story and finish it, you're gonna have one sad girl on your hands. It's gonna be your fault! So get on it.
|
Reviewed By: Sorandom619 On: March 17, 2007 21:05 CDT
Comment/Review:
omg this story is friggin awsome...my only request is UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE!!!
|
Title: OMG
Reviewed By: nekomew78 On: February 21, 2007 12:27 CST
Comment/Review:
PREGNANT???? WHY!!!!!!!! OMG this is awful! I love this story but PREGNANT (takes a deep breath) fine, but it will be a boy and you choose the name. Or......she may not be pregnant......so thats your game. update soon so I can find out more!!. LONGER CHAPTERS MAKES FOR VERY HAPPY VIEWERS!!! Nekomew78.
|
Title: Waiting so patiently...
Reviewed By: BlackLotus [MediaMiner Member] On: January 02, 2007 21:48 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Thanks for the change in the chapter, I was wondering if you noticed that. Don't worry, I do that all the time with my own writings. Now that you've updated the chapter, will we be seeing a new one posted within the coming weeks?
|
Title: Much better....
Reviewed By: BlackLotus [MediaMiner Member] On: December 20, 2006 21:23 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Not bad, him going to his uncle and the uncle not being able to totally help him was good. I like the part where Iroh told him to do what she would want and how he told Katara about things Zuko had done as a child. Nice touch! I'm still wonding how this will process, but am looking forward to the next chapter. Write on, my dear. Write on. Oh, and just a small, teensy tip...read through the chapter again to make sure grammer and spelling are good. And I agree with inuyashalover1221, longer chapters are good, but at your own pace of course!
|
Reviewed By: inuyashalover1221 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 18, 2006 15:35 CST
Comment/Review:
Now that's mean,don't leave it there! I can't believe you made Zuko rape her! Even though that's a very Zuko like thing to do... Just update soon and please make the chaps longer. Here's a idea,why not make Aang come in and try to get Katara after they start getting along?
|
Title: He's still so cocky!
Reviewed By: BlackLotus [MediaMiner Member] On: December 17, 2006 23:34 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Not bad, glad to see that Zuko got a little of what he deserves, but I think Katara has enough anget inside to kick his butt a little more. I defiently want to see him get beat up by her a bit more, and him making her forgive him and not by force? This I have to see. But he was so damn arrogent in the beginning, all this asking her forgiveness and sayiing how he wants things to play out...can you please give him a taste of reality before you get things to work out for the two of them. I do want to know how you plan on brining these two together. And where is Iroh in all this, he was able to make Katara go limp, and then the nephew takes over. Well, good luck with the next chapter. Hope you will be posting soon, and everything I wrote is not a slam towards the author at all. I just want to see Zuko pay a bit more. Another suggestion I would give, is a little more detail on the actions and reactions the characters have....you are beginnig to touch on that more these last two chapters, so good job!!
|
Title: yay
Reviewed By: monterae [MediaMiner Member] On: December 16, 2006 19:59 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
this is working out nicely. good job!
|
Title: gasp!
Reviewed By: monterae [MediaMiner Member] On: December 16, 2006 19:53 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow. zuko rapping her? that's awful! I was expecting a more sensitive attempt... i dk! very riveting!
|
Title: Wow...
Reviewed By: BlackLotus [MediaMiner Member] On: December 15, 2006 22:08 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow...I read the last five chapters and I'm feeling very numb. You got a lot down in a matter of two days, I'm impressed. The chapter with the rape did bother me a bit, and I am curious to see how you tie that into things working out between the characters. Honestly, can you have Katara kick his butt around a bit, he really really deserves it. Please put up the next chapter as soon as you are able, I wonder with a bit of worry where this is going, but I have faith in teh author!
|
Title: Love It!
Reviewed By: BlackLotus [MediaMiner Member] On: November 29, 2006 20:59 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Awesome entrance to the chapter...and the battle scene was pretty good too. I hope you aren't done with the "fire" between these two yet. Is it possible the next chapter could be a few sentences longer, no biggie if not! Just thought I'd ask. Keep it up, can't wait for the next one!
|
Reviewed By: dukgrrl On: November 24, 2006 08:57 CST
Comment/Review:
Hah this is fantastic.
|
Title: That was cruel!
Reviewed By: BlackLotus [MediaMiner Member] On: November 17, 2006 10:45 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was so cruel! How could you let an end trail like that...so unfair! (jumps up and down with little smoke forming beneath my feet). You had a lot more description of the characters thoughts and how they acted toward one another, and I love the word you used to describe Zuko as he puffed out his chest....a rooster-monkey. Very cute. Don't keep the readers in suspense, I'm torn as to whether I want Katara to kiss Zuko or whack him with the tray! Please write the next chapter as soon as you can.
|
Title: So far not bad!
Reviewed By: BlackLotus [MediaMiner Member] On: November 14, 2006 18:31 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Not bad....so far I like what I am reading. Keep up the good work, I am looking forward to the next chapter, and seeing what Katara decides to do. Seduce Zuko, eh? This I gotta see!
|
