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| "Dangerous Game" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Reviewed By: animegeek22 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 11, 2007 11:29 CDT
Comment/Review:
Choppy, but good. Present tense is a hard thing to do, but you still managed to do it pretty well. So no orries about the choppy-ness of it, because it was still something worth reading... And, of course, you had to at least imply buttsex. XD Still, the humor caught me, too, and I love the whole Axel and fire thing. T_T It really makes me wish I was Roxas.
| Reviewed By: Water Sprite [MediaMiner Member] On: November 25, 2006 07:55 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yes, it was choppy. Luckily it fit what you were writing perfectly. It made it feel more like the wedding was just a blur and that insistant throbbing of the garter became just that more insistant with this particular style. Don't forget that choppy can be good when used correctly. I loved the way you were able to use it here! Tens all around! Truthfully the best fic I've read all night! Thank you for taking the time to write it!!
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