| "Man Training" Reviews/Comments [ 41 ] |
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Title: Status of the story
Reviewed By: The writer On: December 19, 2006 15:28 CST
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This is the writer, I'm away from my usual computer and therefore unable to post for a few weeks, everyone can expect the last few chapters some time after the new years. Sorry for the delay, but I'm glad you all like my work!!!
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Reviewed By: spiritwolf30 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 18, 2006 20:01 CST
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I really like this story I ust you wold update this story soon because I can`t wait to see what happens next so come on and update soon please
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Title: Takeshi's Castle
Reviewed By: AJTalon [MediaMiner Member] On: December 15, 2006 12:19 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I do like the age change (it might make sense, given that Naruto failed to graduate twice), and the overall atmosphere works too. Especially Naruto not getting sex, dating and affection (considering how he's been treated in the village). Shizune offering to teach him might be OOC, but for the purposes of the story she and Naruto and everyone else are just fine. Good work!
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Title: Not bad at all
Reviewed By: AJTalon [MediaMiner Member] On: December 15, 2006 11:55 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Not bad, and I like the pairing. Definitely pleasant to find a non-yaoi Naruto story here. Might want to work on the grammar a little, and improve the sentence structure. Otherwise, not bad at all! Keep it up!
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Reviewed By: spiritwolf30 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 13, 2006 13:46 CST
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I really like this story I love the pairing the thing is you barely ever see a Naruto and Shizune fic and now there are alot of Naruto and Hinata fics out there nothing wrng with that heck I like that pairing but there not many Naruto Ino or Naruto and Tenten fics out there so I think one of them would make a really good pairing in a story well thats just my opinion and I wouldn`t mind reading a stor with either of those pairing oh well keep up the great work and update soon
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Reviewed By: Farezzz On: December 10, 2006 18:58 CST
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Nice chapter. The lemon was well written too. Can't wait for the next chapter to be up. Hope its up soon.
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Reviewed By: CommGonn On: December 09, 2006 18:05 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very very nice, please update soon, if you need to I would be happy to burn your bleach stuff for you so you could concentrate on this =)
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Reviewed By: Soul of the Phoenix [MediaMiner Member] On: December 08, 2006 21:26 CST
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As far as lemons go, this is pretty good. Although that anal stuff is kind of gross. Overall, this is probably one of the best Naruto/Shizune fics I've ever come across. Keep up the good work.
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Reviewed By: Naruto_Lovr [MediaMiner Member] On: December 08, 2006 18:28 CST
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Oh ya....I forgot. At the begining of the Anime, Naruto is 12 before the Wave Country Arc. When chuunin exams start, and during the Sasuke retrival arc, Naruto is 13. After the time skip (a.k.a the trainning with Jiraiya for 3 years) in the Naruto seires, he'll be 16. Hope that clears the age thing for you.
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Reviewed By: Naruto_Lovr [MediaMiner Member] On: December 08, 2006 18:23 CST
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O_O HOLT SHITZ! AWSOME! REALLY AWSOME! Keep it coming! Update soon.
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Reviewed By: spiritwolf30 On: December 06, 2006 18:14 CST
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The story is really good please update the story SOON
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Reviewed By: Farezzz On: December 02, 2006 23:54 CST
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Nice fic. The explanaitions on at the end of the chapters do clear up the confusion. The overall fic is very nice. Its got a storyline developing from an accident. I can only imagine how hard it can be to start a fic from such a thing. Can't wait till the next chapter is up. Hope its up soon. Farezzz
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Reviewed By: spiritwolf30 On: December 01, 2006 12:07 CST
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I really like this fic because it is a Naruto/Shizune fic hell it is very very rare to find stories with Naruto paired up with her there are way to many stories where Naruto is paired up with a guy eww and now there are alot of Naruto and Hinata stories nother wrong with that why can`t ppl pair Naruto up with Ino,Kurenai,Temari or Tenten oh well I can`t wait till you update so keep up the great work
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Reviewed By: Soul of the Phoenix [MediaMiner Member] On: November 30, 2006 20:28 CST
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Finally, a decent Naruto/Shizune fic. This has been good so far, and I can't wait for the next installment. Update soon!
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Reviewed By: GrayPheonix [MediaMiner Member] On: November 30, 2006 18:00 CST
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The part of me that wears the Big Boots of DOOM would normally gag at something so sappy. But it didn't. Why? The scene was well written. Not only that, the whole idea is semi-plausible (really, guy slips into the girl by accident? it happens) The Fic is well written, and I like it. Especially Naruto being a natural at this sort of thing. HEll, all humans are, or we couldn't reproduce! lol. Anyway, I like this, its a good start. Though a word of warning, Naruto in cannon is 12 or 13 years old around this time in the canon for the anime and manga, though I still think he could be 15 here, I mean hey, it was a long time in the grand scheme of things in the manga and anime before things really took off, close to 2 and a half years from Naruto making genin to this point in the manga. Just a word of caution, might make this a little AU perhaps. ANyway, beyond that, the fic is good, and I want to read more. Hmmm, pervert naruto, he calls himself and ero-sensei!! lol, amusing thought
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