Reviewed By: animegeek22 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 17, 2006 10:22 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
its okay, but details are improtant. I got a weird image when you described Haruna, considering Sakura has extremely short hair, and I have no idea how much shorter it can get. The short sentences get me, too. They do show your character's attitude, but too many 4-worded sentences can get irritating. But I like your little pyro. He rocks. I mean, hello, Hes a friggin pyro! How can you NOT love him? Well, other than those minor flaws, your introduction is good. I'm hoping you can make a story that's even better.
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