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| "Rain-Dear" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Reviewed By: Deathguise [MediaMiner Member] On: February 01, 2007 22:48 CST
Comment/Review:
An update! *happy dance* Anyway, I enjoyed the second chapter as much as the first. The way you humanize the pokegirls really grabs me. Sure, they're bioweapons and conditioned to sex, but they have feelings and personalities too. Its the reason I try to read the whole little genre of pokegirls in the first place, there's so much potential. I also enjoyed how you can create turmoils elsewhere in the world in a believeable way. Much better than "Team Soandso is randomly attacking a random target cause... they're evil!" I just hope your main character doesnt get the amibition to try and take on those troubles. Im suprised he's adjusted so well to that world in such a short time, let alone try to fight. (Pokeball toting ex-lawyer.. shudder) The only nitpick I have is the fact it takes so far ahead of the previous chapter. I was expecting to see a little more adjustment with the main character and the whole world and customs of pokegirls, but the timelapse doesnt take away from the story, just made me blink mentally. Anyhow, I look forward to seeing an update on any of your stories in the future. Hope this whole thing is understandable. I was tempted to email all of it, the formatting is all wrong on these reviews.
| Reviewed By: Deathguise [MediaMiner Member] On: January 21, 2007 19:03 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I liked the story quite a bit. Easier to understand than some of your other works, at least personally. I have to admit though, the whole snake sequence really threw me for a loop! I had to reread that section twice before I realized the reasoning behind it. I hope you update it soon, or at least eventually. Your writing style is a pleasure read, and though I've seen better stories, there haven't been many. ^^
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