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| "Lab Specimen (I)" Reviews/Comments [ 7 ] | Title: Well Done!
Reviewed By: BrownRecluse [MediaMiner Member] On: June 08, 2008 09:33 CDT
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This is intelligent, well-written, and I loved the way you payed homage to the epistolary style with the juxtaposition of Abraham and Alucard's points of view. That's very difficult to do, but you did it seamlessly, and the story's flow is better because of it. This is one the best Hellsing stories I've read in a long time. Thank you!
| Reviewed By: Inuyashas_Daughter [MediaMiner Member] On: May 06, 2007 22:59 CDT
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Lovely reading. A few grammer and punctuation errors, but all in all a good piece of work. Although it may be good, I unfortunantly cannot call it great, but it is definiently one of the better ones I have read in a long while, so I sincerly hope you continue on ^^
| Title: Awesome.
Reviewed By: Amythyst89 On: January 30, 2007 18:26 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
I absolutely love this. You might want include more of Alucard's comments about how he feels looking back on what happened. I find those rather amusing.
| Reviewed By: Rini Saiyan-jin [MediaMiner Member] On: January 27, 2007 21:23 CST
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This is really good so far, though when I got to then, and everything went black…, I don't particularly like it when a paragraph ends in ellipses. Also, I'm sure you fixed other ellipses. So replace it with a period. As discussed, the 'blame' should have the d, but you insist on not doing that. Anyway, as I said, the lack of use for raspy voice isn't a good reason, though, puking would be. As far as characterization goes, it's well on the mark, in fact, I've enjoyed reading it. So, nice job. =D
| Reviewed By: Fanilia [MediaMiner Member] On: January 03, 2007 20:29 CST
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I did see sever places where there were typos. Most were a small v in Van. There was one or two spots where I felt you used the same type of descriptive passage for how a character spoke to close to each other. The flow was nice, nice enough for the reader (me) to want to read the second chapter when it is ready. I would have this one beta-ed to make it the best it can be.~Fanilia
| Title: Awesome!
Reviewed By: Amythyst [MediaMiner Member] On: December 27, 2006 18:51 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I loved this! Please keep it up! I want to read more!
| Reviewed By: Rini Saiyan-jin [MediaMiner Member] On: December 09, 2006 16:22 CST
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Heh, very nice chapter. I enjoyed their interaction and the nice transition between flashbacks and present.
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