Title: Nice
Reviewed By: A_bigfoot37 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 10, 2006 21:25 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I wonder if you'll put Naruto's natural elemental affinity in the equation of his Suiton jutsu, Fuuton and Suiton make Hyoton, Haku's specialty. Will you also give Naruto a fire affinity given that the symbolic element of Kyuubi no Youko is fire. And if you don't know the bijuu legends and wish to learn about them, then Narutofan.com has a forum with the info, just do a search for the bijuu. Also if you think about it, if Naruto uses Hyoton and Katon jutsu, it would most likely result in a clash of power, because Fire and Ice are opposite elements. Finally you should probably make it clear that with Naruto's relation to Nidaime Hokage, it gives him a relation to Tsunade because Shodaime was Nidaime's older brother as well as Tsunade's grandfather. I'll give more descriptions of a few things as the story progresses. Also, will Naruto inherit Raijin no Ken(Sword of Raijin), if he really is Nidaime Hokage's legacy then that sword should naturally be his inheritance. If Naruto is gonna be trained by a Kenjutsu(Sword Technique) specialist, who has a legendary sword on his own, he should probably have a sword that's also legendary on it's own. You could just get a decent sword from Kusagakure until he's old enough to claim Raijin no Ken. You've got an interesting story here. What are the pairings? And are the two gonna meet Zabuza and Haku and the Kaguya clan?
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