| "The Puppet of Entropy" Reviews/Comments [ 10 ] |
Reviewed By: sinkun [MediaMiner Member] On: October 01, 2007 22:26 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
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dam this is good hope u dont give up on it
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Reviewed By: me On: June 14, 2007 17:56 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Upload next chapter soon. : 1
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Title: I know One of the D Finally!
Reviewed By: Dr. Thinker [MediaMiner Member] On: December 22, 2006 05:22 CST
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That D is Destiny. Logging off, Dr. Thinker
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Title: I think I know.....
Reviewed By: Dr. Thinker [MediaMiner Member] On: December 22, 2006 05:21 CST
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which D does talks in a underlined fashion. "I know that would happen." This D is Destiny. Can't wait for the next chapter, Logging off, Dr. Thinker
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Reviewed By: Drachegirl14 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 21, 2006 11:53 CST
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I am continuing to review this story for one reason. IT FREAKING ROCKS! Keep going. Everything seems good, and Lulu wasn' t too OOC. SO, it was good. Write more ASAPP please! And hey, Merry Christmas!
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Reviewed By: Drachegirl14 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 18, 2006 12:01 CST
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This is incrediable! I love it lots!!!!! please update ASAP!!!!! And maybe I'll write something like this . . . . . Huh, there go the plot bunnies again.
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Reviewed By: Drachegirl14 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 13, 2006 12:00 CST
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You keep writing and I'll kjeep reviewing! And maybe post an I fell into Spira story myself . . . .
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Reviewed By: Drachegirl14 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 12, 2006 11:49 CST
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Not a problem for reviewing. Glad to see the quick updation. More soon please!!!!!
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Reviewed By: Drachegirl14 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 11, 2006 12:00 CST
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Well, this is different, especially from mine. I hope to read more of it ASAP!!!!!! And you didi it well. Im guessing the voices she sensed were the fayth?
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Title: Nice Start
Reviewed By: sephlier [MediaMiner Member] On: December 08, 2006 17:46 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It's pretty good so far. Your story kind of reminds me of The Hitchhiker's Guide To The Galaxy (more so the BBC series.) I felt, to a point, that I was watching part of Final Fantasy XII all over again-that part was interesting as well. I didn't find any spelling mistakes but as far as grammar-there were some sentences that didn't seem to flow correctly. I found two cases where certain words were included in a sentence that didn't need to be there. One sentence near the end of the second chapter/first chapter (where she's trying to scream) has the word "net"...it just seems out of place. For originality, I've read a few stories where an original character is thrust into a foreign world but not as detailed as what happened to your girl-most of the time they just walk through a worm-hole. My ranking was mainly for creativity more then originality, though. For the overall and enjoyment factor they go hand in hand. I really liked your start and I plan to keep reading on! I've added you to my favorite author's list!
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