| "Amidst the Moonlight" Reviews/Comments [ 8 ] |
Reviewed By: RadioActiveRedhead [MediaMiner Member] On: March 10, 2008 13:57 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You should put people speaking on their own separate lines like say you write out a description:Kagome walks along the valley and finds a young chicken. (press enter button before typing what she says) "Hello chicken" (press enter button again before you write what the chicken says) "Hello lady!" :D I hope that made sense. The way you write both parties talking in the same paragraph makes it hard to follow who is talking to who. Other than that your fanfic is pretty damn good and pretty easy to follow whats going on other than who is talking to who. Good job!
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Reviewed By: alexus [MediaMiner Member] On: July 31, 2007 10:35 CDT
Comment/Review:
please please please update. I want to know what happens.
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Reviewed By: goddeskagome213 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 21, 2007 00:27 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this is really good. PLZ update...I'm dying to know what happens. You left a cliffhanger.
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Title: Review
Reviewed By: silentdeath911 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 10, 2007 19:28 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
So far so good keep me updated thanks!
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Title: hmmm
Reviewed By: ji-an [MediaMiner Member] On: December 11, 2006 20:29 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is nice. Don't get upset here, this is just constructive critisism. I am by far no expert but I have to say, your writing style could use a little more improvment. Spelling and grammer aren't too bad, but you need to know that you have a little problem with repitition. Try not to repeat the same word more than twice in a paragraph, it's distracting to the reader. As for the story itself, it's very interesting and I look forward to seeing where you are going to take this.
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Reviewed By: ashfire [MediaMiner Member] On: December 10, 2006 20:22 CST
Comment/Review:
love it
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Reviewed By: Millicent_Hellix [MediaMiner Member] On: December 10, 2006 02:33 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a very different story then ther other. It has a mild Angst feel to it. Will it go darker as the story goes on? anyway, I love keep it up.
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Reviewed By: XxhellzgurlxX [MediaMiner Member] On: December 09, 2006 01:47 CST
Comment/Review:
LOVED IT plz update....wow i'm the first to review arent i lucky lol agian i loved it
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