Title: Here Goes
Reviewed By: sephlier [MediaMiner Member] On: December 30, 2006 10:29 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm not used to the idea of Cloud with anyone but Zack or Sephiroth, really. I do have a couple pictures on the hard drive that are Cloud and Reno...it is interesting but just not my thing. I am sorry that I'm not familiar with the other two people-Donnovan and Spike. Anyway, my ratings have nothing to do with your choice of pairing. The story seemed to be indifferent or detached-yes, I failed the point of view tests in English. *ahem* Style Of Writing : Your style was interesting but didn't seem to convey much emotion. I'm a Reno fan so that kind of saved me...I just could not identify with anyone. I noticed you mentioning something about this story being a prequel or sequel-maybe, you'll flesh out the rest of story as you can go on. Spelling and Grammar : I didn't find any spelling mistakes. What I did find was mainly grammar oriented. I'm no expert (trust me on that one ^^;) but it was something about seeing so many ands starting off a sentence. I ran a grammar check with XP and the suggestions it offered weren't too far off from what you already submitted-so I might just be picky and old fashioned.Originality/Creativity:For what you shared-I felt it was quite original and creative. I'm not used to seeing parings "go around" that way. Your story contained a lot of good character descriptions, too. I found myself often thinking that's an inventive way to describe Reno's hair. Enjoyment Factor : I think it was the fact that the story was so distant. I can't remember the rating you posted, I'm sorry. I read because of your title. I have never encountered that word before outside of an old Muppet Show episode. There was a brief song/skit featuring Scooter and his monophonic symphony (guitar, harmonica, and one other instrument that escapes me). Trust me; I was aware there would be no Muppets in your story-it was just the use of the word; for your title. Honestly, I needed to read this story a few times to make sure I didn't miss anything. I still feel like nothing soaked in. I went through multiple times also to combat my waning interest.Overall Rating : I felt many of the problems I had with understanding it were mine alone. Don't get me wrong, it's not a bad story! I took a brief look at a couple of your other stories and noticed that you use many different styles-pus it looked liked several of them were doing well in terms of readers and feedback. I am going to add you to my favorites list because I'm anxious to see what you do with this introduction. I might read a couple of the other stories as well...Yu Gi Oh! isn't a favorite fandom of mine but I will give anything a shot. I'm sorry about not being able to offer anything more in terms of a review. Thank you for your time and keep writing!
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