Title: Needs Some Work
Reviewed By: Terdwilicker [MediaMiner Member] On: December 29, 2006 11:14 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 4 of 10
Overall Rating: 3 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm trying to enjoy your fic, I really am. While the setting isn't particularly original, it has potential if applied properly. The main problem is it really needs spellcheck. You misspelled a LOT of words, and doubled others. There are " missing. Also, its traditional to put dialogue from different speakers on different lines with the words ," said so_and_so. It may seem unkind to challenge a fic based on poor grammar, however it greatly distracts from your story. Do you want your readers to enjoy your story or do you want them to wince at 6th grade spelling errors? Please, fix this and replace it and you'll get a better reception to your idea.
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