| "Through the Punching Glass" Reviews/Comments [ 12 ] |
Reviewed By: BLaDeFuRy On: May 03, 2007 05:23 CDT
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cool...can't wait for the next chapter
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Reviewed By: BLaDeFuRy On: May 03, 2007 05:23 CDT
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cool...keep updating
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Reviewed By: fm wave On: April 02, 2007 07:00 CDT
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Motoko's sister needs to fight naruto and get her butt creamed but before this she saked her husband and takes naruto on the rebaund after he beats her.
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Reviewed By: samster On: April 02, 2007 06:56 CDT
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CA8802u are wrong ki and chakra r totally different ki is just body energy but chakra is body AND spirit energy in harmony. get your naruto facts right... no afance tho
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Title: Is that it?
Reviewed By: Matrix Guyver On: February 28, 2007 16:02 CST
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Its been almost 2 month. So is the story on pause, or are you throwing it to the way-side?
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Title: Amusing
Reviewed By: Matrix Guyver On: February 03, 2007 22:52 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I just read chapter 2, pretty funny! Nice installment. Also, being a fan of both Love Hina and Naruto, im going to give my honest opinion and say that Naruto can so kick Motoko ass. I'll be back when the next chapter is up, great job so far!
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Reviewed By: Disgruntled Bum On: February 03, 2007 14:34 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 4 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is really just starting out, so I cannot really give my opinion of the overall story (even though I did rate it). However, a few things irritate me about it. One thing was how you said that the Shodaime ad a map that Arashi Uzumaki brought back...that does not fit. Arashi was the Fourth Hokage, and thus did not live at the same time as the Shodaime. They both died, before Sarutobi became Hokage. Its even why he became Hokage. Therefore, they would not have been around at the same time. Another thing is how the fight with Motoko was.. I just don't like it for reasons stated by others. Other than that stuff though, its definitely a decent fic now, with a fair amount of potential.
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Title: Nice update
Reviewed By: Matrix Guyver On: January 29, 2007 09:10 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Nice revamp of the chapter dude. Very informational and entertaining. Good luck with school and work and I'll see ya when the next chapter is up. p.s. I think rotating between Kentauro chapters and Naturo chapters is a good idea.
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Reviewed By: CA8802 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 08, 2007 22:09 CST
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hm. Gonna have to remember to use HTML breaklines instead of pressing enter for future review.Sorry for the wall of text in my review.
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Reviewed By: CA8802 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 08, 2007 22:06 CST
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uh... Kunai and shuriken are not unique to the Naruto universe, Motoko would have known what they were. And Chackra used for ninjutsu/genjutsu in Naruto is the same thing as Ki/Chi used in most of Motoko's techniques. And lastly, imo, it would be pretty much impossible to break a katana using a shuriken, even if it was enhanced by Chackra/Chi/Ki/Qi. I predict that for Naruto to break a properly built katana using a shuriken, he'd need to charge it with Chakra and be in one-tail Kyuubi form to get enough force into the throw. I was enjoying reading this until I saw how utterly outmatched Motoko was. Granted the shinobi of Naruto are no pushovers, but Motoko is quite skilled herself. Odds are Naruto would at least get a work out from fighting her. Pre-Tsunade training Sakura wouldn't be able to beat her, even Sakura knows how pathetic she was at that point("that point" being before Tsunade's training)
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Title: Not too shabby
Reviewed By: DarkiveDracormia [MediaMiner Member] On: January 07, 2007 17:50 CST
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huh, i gotta say that this is a very unlikely crossover. A surprisingly good one, but unlikely. there's definately alot you can do with this, keep it up!
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Title: Awsome start
Reviewed By: Matrix Guyver On: December 31, 2006 15:32 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Pretty cool start so far. You've defiantly caught my eye, can't wait to see how this plays out, nice.
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