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| "Mine" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] | Reviewed By: Dottie On: April 26, 2007 23:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
You did a fantastic job of writing it. Great wording, very different and of course, extremely sexy. But I found some issues, and one bothered me a lot. Sasuke had to be in some major pain that entire time... You didn't mention anything about Naruto lubing up fingers or any appendage for that matter. He just blindly jammed them in. I know this is fiction and fantasy, but honestly, with these kinds of things, you have to have some reality, you know? Other than that, like I said, I loved it thoroughly. Keep up the great work and expect more comments from me in the future.
| Reviewed By: Dark_light101 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 28, 2007 01:44 CST
Comment/Review:
It was a good story, I liked how you made Naruto more aggressive towards Sauske, mostly with NaruxSau Sauske is the aggressive one. Just a few suggestion from one writer to another, you should add a little more build up, the sex happened to suddenly it caught me off guard. Also, you should try to make the sex scenes more interesting, because sex seems to have become so mainstream anymore, it's just flirt, head, fuck, but if your able to find other means to which two characters activities ensue, it makes for a better read.
| Reviewed By: Boo luvs u On: February 13, 2007 17:17 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story was awsome keep it up!
| Reviewed By: The_12-Tailed_Foxy_Cat [MediaMiner Member] On: January 04, 2007 04:33 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
daaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaanm that was awesome that was the sexiest yaoi fic i've ever seen naruto sounded soooooooooooooooooooooooo sexy
| Reviewed By: im_afakexx [MediaMiner Member] On: December 31, 2006 20:21 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ah...I think I need a cold shower... ...I think i might die from what fangirls call 'teh hotness'
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