Title: I Know You
Reviewed By: sephlier [MediaMiner Member] On: January 09, 2007 09:09 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, besides the fact that I believe I know you-I liked this story. The random silliness was a nice touch and thank god, that it didn't involve the cast of Sex In The City like I had originally expected. So, the ratings: Style Of Writing : I found a few mistakes and a couple of them did stop me from continuing. Your first chapter-you forgot to "turn off" the italics after you gave your disclaimer-although, that could also be my mistake since it was pretty much a flashback. Spelling & Grammar : While I did not find any spelling mistakes, I did see cases of the wrong words being used along with some grammar errors. Sephiroth slowly opened his eyes slowly. "Sephiroth opened his eyes slowly" or "Sephiroth slowly opened his eyes" works fine. He was surrounding by large buildings, endless noise I think "surrounded" works better. Seph and the random dude stood outside of the door the dude's apartment as he went to unlock it with his keys. Maybe, "Seph and the random dude stood outside the apartment." "I seems there is some sort of magical barrier in this place," Sephiroth observed. I think you meant, "It seems." It appears this creatures have set I think you meant "these." ^^; Sorry, I don't mean to be picky. I did enjoy this story but as I mentioned-many of the problem spots I found did cause me to pause. Originality/Creativity: It was a good story and probably the second story I have read dealing with time displacement-usually, I read Alternate Universe or Continuation. Enjoyment Factor : I feel like a broken record by saying that I liked this story. It was pretty funny! Overall Rating : This was a little lower because of the issues mentioned above and I found one other point that got me wondering. You mentioned Masamune as being a Katana...I don't think it was/is a Katana, per say. Because of the sheer length, I'd say it was a Daikatana or taito/uchigatana. Again, I'm sorry for being picky! I really did enjoy this story and I have added it to my favorites. I loved the whole cosplay bit-having just come back from a convention myself. ^^;
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