Reviewed By: Alliecoolgirl [MediaMiner Member] On: November 09, 2007 21:43 CST Comment/Review: Wow! Good concept, but I think that you could use more editing... like paragraphs, when two people talk it gets really confusing if you put it in the same paragraph... then Your details and stuff are ok, but Good fanfiction, that only needs a few touch-ups! (Email me if you want some help editing!!)Oh, and please update!!!!!
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