| "Aqua" Reviews/Comments [ 16 ] |
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Reviewed By: KikuMizu [MediaMiner Member] On: January 17, 2010 16:09 CST
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Good good. I like this chapter. You are keeping Aqua the same and it is true, love will be the only thing that sets her apart from the rest and free her at last. Good work.
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Reviewed By: kisaru [MediaMiner Member] On: September 25, 2009 23:02 CDT
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.....Or not.......Sorry again, and I LOVE all your stories that you have written so far. XD
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Reviewed By: kisaru [MediaMiner Member] On: September 25, 2009 23:01 CDT
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Sorry about the last comment ^ ^' I messed accidently did the code twice. ^ ^'
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Reviewed By: kisaru [MediaMiner Member] On: September 25, 2009 23:00 CDT
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Love the story! XD thanks for updating it recently, and I am looking foward to reading more. ^ ^
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Reviewed By: KikuMizu [MediaMiner Member] On: September 24, 2009 15:35 CDT
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Okay...hurry up and get some more out...you know I like this story and I will keep pestering you for more. That and I know where you live.
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Reviewed By: KikuMizu [MediaMiner Member] On: September 24, 2009 15:24 CDT
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Chapter 21's...kinda...short.
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Reviewed By: KikuMizu [MediaMiner Member] On: September 24, 2009 15:22 CDT
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Chapter 20 "Perhaps," Aqua agreed. She paused, then asked, "You're the one that fell in love with the Night-n-Gale captain, aren't you?" How does aqua know that? Sounds like it came out of thin air.
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Reviewed By: KikuMizu [MediaMiner Member] On: September 21, 2009 16:08 CDT
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Chapter 17 "Oh," was all he could manage to say. For a few moments all that could be heard was the deafening silence of the forest around them. "How did you manage to hide your ears and fit in with these to try and break his disappointment at her answer to his question. WTF?
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Reviewed By: KikuMizu [MediaMiner Member] On: September 21, 2009 15:46 CDT
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Chapter 14 Auntie could barely her restrained as she screamed and thrashed around something fierce. Um...a word is missing there... Go Aqua!
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Reviewed By: KikuMizu [MediaMiner Member] On: September 20, 2009 16:51 CDT
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Chapter 10 When the captain is waiting for the two to catch up, I think it should be "them" instead of "him" since Jonathan was keeping up with him, or was it Terald? Anyway, when the captain interupts the foreign king by choking him, the sentence needs a new begining because "Here Lak..." doesn't sound right.
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Reviewed By: KikuMizu [MediaMiner Member] On: September 17, 2009 13:58 CDT
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Chapter2: tang-top pajamas? Sorry, just so you don't miss anything...
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Reviewed By: KikuMizu [MediaMiner Member] On: September 16, 2009 15:43 CDT
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There was one spot that bugged me. Where was it...Ah ha: Aqua made no response to his question and settled for glaring at him. Silence stretched between them for several minutes before, "Why do you suggest that I stay within the confines of these overly large plants?" This makes it sound like Aqua is the one saying the words when the next sentence clearly illustrates that she didn't. I would maybe start with the dialogue as the beginning of a new line and then say that Darrin was the one asking it to make it less confusing. And the back and forth dialogue between Aqua and Darrin should be a bit more discriptive, if possible, because it is such a back and forth kind of conversation that starts to lull because that's all there is: a bunch of talking. Other than that though, it was great. you know this is my favorite of your's.
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Title: *dies*
Reviewed By: Hikaru-RoseRed [MediaMiner Member] On: October 09, 2007 23:33 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
,font size=12> Oh My Gosh! You MUST finish this story. I havent stopped reading it for the past several hours and i have to know what happens. I would have liked a little more detail on the death of Ambers trainer but thats just the sadist in me. Anyway I love this story! the characters and the plot a just lovely i mean i do not think i have ever seen a story quiet like this. and you know? It almost gets me out of my writers block stuper i have been in for ages now. . . I noticed that you have comments from people two months in a row then you skip a month then you had a comment a few months back. I didnt look at the up date times but i hope that you are still working with this story and are planning to finish it. I am not normally a spazy person but your story line and the story itself has made me spazy ;-; Now you see what you have done to my cold exterior!? sorry im okay now anyway i really hope that you finish this soooooooon or atleast soonish. I added this story to my favorites list and i plan to look at your other stories too so i might just add you to my favoirte authers list. only time will tell toodles then!
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Title: Update!!!
Reviewed By: kashumaru [MediaMiner Member] On: July 19, 2007 18:50 CDT
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It's been so long since had update the story *pouts* I showed one of my sisters it and she was yelling at me cuz i showed her this story >< She said it was really good and was mad at me cuz it wasn't finished lol It is a great story and we both would love to read the rest when you post up some more ^ ^ keep up the hard work k?
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Title: Please write more
Reviewed By: kashumaru [MediaMiner Member] On: April 26, 2007 17:26 CDT
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I really like the story and I read itat least five times now ^ ^ In hope that you are able to update in the future and I also wanted to tell you too keep up the good work on your other stories s well as this one ^ ~
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