| "Secretes withing the Pack" Reviews/Comments [ 41 ] |
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Reviewed By: loveinuyasha911 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 24, 2007 23:30 CST
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pleaseeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee update soon..please with hiei on top..lol...well i love this chapter and i cant wait till you update..also i know how you feel my laptop did the same thing only it was destroid by a stupid friend of mine who tried to fix it....
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Reviewed By: HeartStar [MediaMiner Member] On: January 24, 2007 01:44 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
nice update soon thank you.
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Reviewed By: madmiko [MediaMiner Member] On: January 23, 2007 19:13 CST
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Love new chapters to read! So, she went home and they didn't even look for her? Lucky for them they're going to come across her by accident, huh? So, how mad is Hiei? What will he do when he comes face to face with her again? Will he decide he wants her, or just wants to kill her for knocking him out and leaving? Ha! So, Sesshoumaru should be there at the club, too, huh? Looking forward to all the fallout when everyone sees her!! Write more soon! (I love these quick updates!)
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Reviewed By: animeboysrock23 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 22, 2007 23:29 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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please continue
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Reviewed By: loveinuyasha911 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 21, 2007 20:44 CST
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please update soon..............pleaseeee with hiei on top..pleaseeeeeee
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Reviewed By: HeartStar [MediaMiner Member] On: January 20, 2007 01:59 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
NICCCCCCCCE!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: madmiko [MediaMiner Member] On: January 20, 2007 00:19 CST
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Good chapter! I liked the part about her being part fire and part ice as punishment for making an impure wish -- that tied that up nicely. She's still trying to leave ro protect them, huh? Where is she going? I liked the way she tried to distract Hiei -- too bad it backfired a bit. (Darn hormones! LOL!) But Hey! At least we got some fluff going. Will he go after her when he wakes up? He's going to be pretty pissed off, isn't he? Can't wait for the next chapter!
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Reviewed By: HeartStar [MediaMiner Member] On: January 19, 2007 03:17 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Thanks For updateing
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Reviewed By: madmiko [MediaMiner Member] On: January 18, 2007 23:15 CST
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Nice job! I liked her story about what happened in the final battle. Very touching segment about her and Inuyasha -- very well done. Hmmm. How would she have worded a wish to be an inu youkai that wouldn't corrupt the jewel? Can't wait to find out the rest of her story! The part with Youko was interesting, too. They were enemies? He tried to hurt Shippou? Well, he wasn't a nice youkai back then. Looking forward to your next chapter!
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Reviewed By: madmiko [MediaMiner Member] On: January 17, 2007 19:08 CST
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Thanks for updating again so quickly! I liked the way she found out about the others, then refused to tell them about herself. And it was pretty amazing how much information we found out from that one little note Naraku left. Still a lot to find out, though, like how she became youkai, what the wish was, how is she the Lady of the Western Lands, etc. Was her soon-to-be mate Inuyasha or Sesshoumaru? She is obviously attracted to Hiei -- is he as attracted to her? I can't wait for more! Keep going!
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Reviewed By: HeartStar [MediaMiner Member] On: January 17, 2007 12:46 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Do it agian !!!I want to see what happens next.
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Reviewed By: madmiko [MediaMiner Member] On: January 17, 2007 01:58 CST
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Nice chapter! Now that they've met, I can't wait to see where the story goes. Does Kagome have the jewel? Is she still traveling back and forth? Can't wait to find out about her youkai heritage. Will she be staying with Hiei and Kurama long? Does she still have family at the shrine? Lots of questions, I know, and I'm looking forward to finding out the answers!! Good luck with your exams!
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Reviewed By: HeartStar [MediaMiner Member] On: January 16, 2007 14:49 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
What do you mean this was already out here I didn't see it please have the other chapter up soon I want to know what happens nextr please. I love how this is going so far.
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Reviewed By: madmiko [MediaMiner Member] On: January 16, 2007 05:27 CST
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This sounds good so far! I really hope you DO finish it. From the summary, it sounds like they will all eventually end up with the Inuyasha group. Are the "Secrets in the Pack" referring to Kagome and Hiei's relationship? Or to her youkai blood? Or both? I can't wait to see what happens as she stays at Hiei and Kurama's place. It really WAS kind of mean of Hiei to let her get hurt because he wanted to see what she could do with her powers sealed. I'm sure he'll make it up to her eventually, ne? Like i said, this sounds great, and I hope you write more for it SOON!!!
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Title: Good work
Reviewed By: Xodacidal [MediaMiner Member] On: January 16, 2007 00:57 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, you know who this is. Or should atleast. The piece you did here is excellent so far. Some spelling errors were to be expected but overall, I am pleased and fascinated by what you have so far. The only plausible issue I have with the story is the way it starts. I am always a sucker for setting a story up but I do see the need to jump right into everything. Hopefully, later on in the story, the characters become more developed the way you see them and not as they were entirely made by their respective owners. Depending on the planned length of this story, perhaps you should slow it down instead of rushing through every scene. It is a quick thrill the way it is and very inviting to see what else will go on later on. My attention is hooked and waiting for the following chapters. -Xod
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