| "One Night of Drinking" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] |
Reviewed By: bittersweet raven On: February 27, 2008 19:37 CST
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omg u should have a 3-way wit ha-san 'gure and tohru! *shiver* that'd be hott!
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Reviewed By: rinmaru [MediaMiner Member] On: June 29, 2007 00:16 CDT
Comment/Review:
I thought it was great, but you need to update! And there were a few spelling mistakes.
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Reviewed By: anonomous_angel On: April 10, 2007 19:48 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
It's rather funny but I have to say, poor Toru-chan. Shigure seems to be a bit depressed when she sais she loves him and i do think they all feel a little more then just friends for her, who wouldn't if she's the only girl they've ever really known personally. I mean after living with her for almost a year there had got to be some things about her that they would wish their perfect woman to have if the isn't already their perfict match. How you could mistake alchohol for water I don't know but then again if she's never even had alchohol before then she wouldn't know any better. Looking forward to the nxt chapter and please don't takt to long to post it. Yours truly CHEL
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Reviewed By: Sam_Sama_Death [MediaMiner Member] On: March 19, 2007 23:23 CDT
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I don't think that the alcohol would keep her out of commission for more than one day, honestly. Unless there was something that wasn't alcohol in there that was far worse than alcohol... ANYWAY, I do hope you continue though you might want to invest in spell-check, there were several mistakes as far as grammer is concerened as well, though I really did enjoy it. ^.^
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Reviewed By: _Loveless_ On: January 27, 2007 03:15 CST
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
You really should continue..this is such a cute story.. =]
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