"Strip Duel" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] |
Title: omg plz write more chapters Reviewed By: Desgardia [MediaMiner Member] On: November 22, 2008 11:12 CST Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10 Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review: i lik where this is going so plz when u get time add more chaps cuz i am reli intrested in seeing a strip duel
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Title: cool Reviewed By: Blood Red Devil Beserker [MediaMiner Member] On: July 22, 2007 17:40 CDT Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10 Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review: update pretty please. I suggest as the title say have Jaden and Alexis strips duel expcet afterwards they end up havign loving passiate sex and afterward admit the love they have for one another. Also and this is my opinion have Alexis´friends scretly watchign that woudl be amusing. But please do keep on writing ths fic and addign more chapters to it. I wish to see mroe lemons featuring this couple
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Reviewed By: Inusbabe [MediaMiner Member] On: April 21, 2007 14:40 CDT Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Comment/Review: Need to really work on spelling. This is also not a Hentai One-Shot. Keep trying and ask some to beta for you.
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Reviewed By: Demon of RHS [MediaMiner Member] On: April 09, 2007 11:03 CDT Comment/Review: you need to continue with this fic, it's pretty good so far
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Reviewed By: AnimeFreak317 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 21, 2007 20:44 CST Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10 Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review: This is a nice start off to the fic. I like how you built up to the first kiss expressing emotions on both sides. However, the only problems I have are... 1.) Some spelling errors; 2.) No actual duel was posted leading up to the stripping. I can understand this if it's in a later chapter, however your description is misleading. You should post that the "ACTION" will take place within a few chapters. I look forward to your next chapter.
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