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| "War Is Kind" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Title: Needs Some Work
Reviewed By: Terdwilicker [MediaMiner Member] On: January 26, 2007 23:59 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 4 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
The concept is cute enough. However, there's some problems. Spell check corrects words to make sure they're spelled right. It doesn't check that you used the right words, however. Example? You used conscience instead of conscious to describe someone waking from a blow to the head. There are many places where misused words made me wince and it was so painful I con't pass 3 pages of your story. Please PLEASE fix and update. I'm willing to reread your work and give a kinder and more helpful review with suggestions if you do that.
| Reviewed By: Steve 01 On: January 25, 2007 19:17 CST
Comment/Review:
Finally, I have been waiting for months for a war fic. This is only the third one I have managed to find. Keep up the good work, I can't wait for the next chapter!
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