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Title: constructive not destructive
Reviewed By: asialisek [MediaMiner Member] On: October 09, 2010 12:09 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 3 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 3 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 2 of 10
Overall Rating: 3 of 10 Comment/Review:
OOC. So very OOC. This is just my opinion, so please don't think I'm flaming you. YOU have fic written, concept and execution, and I do not. I simply read them.. a LOT of them. :) So I'm hoping this be taken more as constructive crit than just flat out crit. It's not just about taking the names and images of the characters and completely disregarding their personalities. There's more to a character, of course, than that outward facade, but in my opinion the best stories are the ones that explore the complex natures of those pretty boys we all enjoy placing in Oh so trying situations. I love Mpreg, I mean.. I think I have a slightly unhealthy obsession with it actually. I scour for fics almost daily, and the majority of them are just fruitless fluff. In the best, and I mean edge of your seat ''what the hell's gonna happen next?!'' fics, the author (99.9%) of the time takes on the challenge of taking their favorite pairing and twisting circumstances and taking liberties with biology, but never sacrificing the soul of the character. Yes, there are fluff fics that are good, but again, they retain something of the original. The reason I'm writing u this massive note is because you have a developing style that has potential. Believe you me, there are NOT enough authors out there that stay on the bandwagon. *shakes head* So all in all, it's not just about projecting a ''girly'' image onto a boyish face, but challenging yourself to stay true to the rough, obstinate, emotionally challenged and socially retarded nature of these two, the feelings behind the masks they project, the reason they show one thing and feel another if they feel at all, what will change, what will stay the same, how can someone who has an obsessive mission in life find a way to care about another human being, and how can he do that without becoming a completely different person (with sociopaths its definitely not easy to ween them off the crazy). Just random raaaaaaaandom suggestions to kind of add substance. I'm totally full of it btw. >_< I just wanted to share that, and I hope I could offer something. If not, *shrugs*. :) To each his own~ Se la vie~ Cheers~ Joanna K.
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Reviewed By: White_Witch_Sakura [MediaMiner Member] On: January 29, 2009 08:39 CST
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I have to say that this is a very well writen story. I love the couples that are together in it. So keep it up and update soon.
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Reviewed By: maegerakawaii [MediaMiner Member] On: July 13, 2008 04:23 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I was sooo happy to seen an update, especially since I just wrote a review asking for one. And I found TWO new chapters. YAY! Please keep up the good work with this fic. I loved the Tseng/Rufus scene by the way. Also, I really enjoyed this particular fic, so I started reading fics by the same author. I started on "Come back to me, come back to us". I like that one as well. I know I'm supposed to saying more awesome things about the FF fic, but I just wanted to ask if chapter 8 of the DBZ fic really was cut off. I really couldn't follow what happened between chapters 8 and 9. I got really lost. Anyways both these fics are a good read. Thank you for posting them.
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Reviewed By: maegerakawaii [MediaMiner Member] On: July 12, 2008 17:35 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is such a captivating fic. I can't wait for the next chapter. Will Rufus find out about Tseng? I'm starting to like Tifa less and less. I can't believe the nerve she has. Will she try to harm the Sephiroth's and Cloud's relationship. That would be terrible. I read this fic all in one go. It's a pity Montgomery is still alive. He should have died for what he did. But I guess that would have been an easy way out for him. Instead I'll just wish that he is plagued by horrible nightmares while he's in a coma. Anyways, please update soon because this is a really great read. Cloud and Sephiroth are so cute together. XD!!!
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Reviewed By: reicheru_x [MediaMiner Member] On: July 06, 2008 05:08 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this its an amazing story and I am enjoying it a lot. Nut oh my Cloud and Sephiroths kid would be one cute child especially if she has silver hair and blue eyes or even blonde with Sephiroths green cat like eyes.. :D so cute XD Can't wait to read more i was like noo when i finished please update soon this so amazing and I am really getting into it
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Reviewed By: Love Psycho [MediaMiner Member] On: June 29, 2008 08:42 CDT
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Oh dear...this is really good. I hope they are okay though... I'm feeling kinda sorry for Tifa right now...she's going to have her dream crushed badly... SephCloud cupcakes for you!
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Reviewed By: niwings [MediaMiner Member] On: November 12, 2007 05:42 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Sadness, want to read more! Please update soon. Seph is so cute in this chapter. Hojo needs to die like one of the retards in V for Vendetta (spelling?).
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Reviewed By: ichiwings [MediaMiner Member] On: November 09, 2007 11:38 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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I love this story soooo much! I just want to run up and hug cloud and seph! they are so cute! I love the storyline oh so much! cookies for you!
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Reviewed By: CatNeko13 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 09, 2007 09:14 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
soooo goood!You guys are great!
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Reviewed By: niwings [MediaMiner Member] On: November 09, 2007 05:39 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Please update soon!!!! I love this story! It is unique and exciting. I want to find out what happens next! I loved Cloud's mother's personality.
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Reviewed By: animaygurl [MediaMiner Member] On: July 04, 2007 01:53 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story is really good! I'm surprised that more people haven't reviewed... but it's really good and I would absolutely LOVE it if you updated!!!
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Reviewed By: kuro fenikkusu [MediaMiner Member] On: June 15, 2007 08:42 CDT
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YOu watch stargate too? Cool. I lmao at that part.
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Reviewed By: kuro fenikkusu [MediaMiner Member] On: June 14, 2007 21:54 CDT
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Holy shit clouds a hermaphrodite.
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Reviewed By: CatNeko13 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 25, 2007 11:13 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
omg please write more this is so cool!please please write more!I want to see what Sephy does to Monty and when Cloud will give birth to their daughter!
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Title: =o
Reviewed By: BelovedEllie [MediaMiner Member] On: April 04, 2007 13:27 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
omfg...that wz freakin amazing....cloud's pregnant....i'll nvr b able 2 look at him the same again...is cloud a girl in this....confuzed.....o well lemme keep reading...i wz just caught off gaurd by that whole pregnent bit ya know....it cms like i'll luv this story....it's the most creative/original thing i've evr read...well....right after the twilight series^^...i luv this story^^
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Reviewed By: shatter the sky comes quietly On: February 28, 2007 00:18 CST
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Cool. This is very good. Great explanation on how Cloud got pregnant. The bit with the baby and Tseng is a little confusing though. Where did the baby come from, who birthed it? Will Tifa and Barrett ever show up? What about the others? The black feathers, does that mean Seph has a wing? Looking forward to more.
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