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| "Sanctuary" Reviews/Comments [ 10 ] | Title: help me
Reviewed By: kjpanny [MediaMiner Member] On: January 10, 2009 13:27 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
okay, what happened to the gol ol'e paragraphs. second. dude what is wrong wid u!!!!!!!!???????? Kagome's mom is not like that and inuyasha will never do something lke that. i understand that opinions count. but tht was so sick and wrong. i cudnt even bring myself to read alll of it. ur writing is good but try making an inukag or an seshkag, though inu kag is more appreciated. and make paragraphs. dont get mad at me okay. when writing laways expect critisism. its wht hepls us get our ideas.
| Reviewed By: Nick F. On: November 20, 2007 08:45 CST
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Paragraphs are nice things. I would love to read your story, but only after you put in paragraphs and line breaks.
| Reviewed By: unistar [MediaMiner Member] On: November 19, 2007 15:24 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
twisted but good story... not really in favor of the pairing (inuyasha & kagome's mom) though... don't know why kagome's mom did what she did with inuyasha when she knows kagome has feelings for him... great work though...
| Reviewed By: ScifiAmy [MediaMiner Member] On: March 07, 2007 23:50 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
You've GOT to tell people WHO your story is about. The story had a good start, I thought it was about I/K but oh my god! You wrote it about I/and her MOM! That is WRONG, WRONG, WRONG on so many levels. I had to stop reading immediately and cringe at the thought of, geeze oh my god...When I realized where the story was headed! GROSS, YUCH, BLEAH (I am very much an adult, AND I couldn't stand the thought!) How could her mom betray her like that!!! I could never do that to my daughter. I would rather cheat on my husband if I had to choose between the two! No way! PUT A DISCLAIMER OF WHO IT IS ABOUT PLEASE!
| Title: WTF?
Reviewed By: InlovesKAG On: February 07, 2007 18:16 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 2 of 10
Overall Rating: 2 of 10 Comment/Review:
WHAT THE HELL IS THISD NASTY SHIT!!! why would you even write shit like this it's fucked up! i have read bad couples before but this..this is just not even right! i couldn't even read it after i found out were the hell this story was going! i mean wtf?your a good writer dont get me wrong?! but this was hella wrong in everyway possible! i love Inuyasha/kagome and so dose most of the freaken world! but then there are thoughs people who think inu/sango or iniu/kikyo! i have nothing agaist them its there opinion! and i think that opinion is great..but this is fucked up i'm sorry maybe if you wrote something eles! if your made i'm sorry your really a good writer and i lov the way the story is put out but..no ...just no way in hell! plz fix this or get reed of it! luv-randomfandom!
| Reviewed By: Moon_essence1 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 03, 2007 00:46 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG!!! Kagome's mom is a hussie!! Inuyasha's a hussie!! geeze how could they do that to Kagome thats sooo fucked up! 0.0' But all n all it was a great story BUT FUCKED UP!! Lol ;) keep up the great work! Ja ne ~Sadie~
| Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: February 02, 2007 01:32 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I kind of agree with Sutlesarcasm. I loved this story, and hated it, all at the same time. Your writing style is excellent. I didn't notice any errors, so if there were any, that just shows you how into the storyline I was. You are a wonderful writer, truly, because even though I'm against that pairing, I found I was unable to turn away. I got completely immersed in the fantasy world you created, and actually found myself getting angry with Kagome's mother. How could she DO such a thing? So you accomplished your goal, tenfold, as any writer's goal is to allow their readers to become lost in the world of their creation. On top of that, the situation was not, in reality, a farfetched one. The characters did not seem grossly "out of character" as is the case with most off-canon parings. I could easily see Inuyasha's nervous respect for Kagome's mother causing his inability to tell her no as the night progressed. Plus, as you mentioned briefly in the beginning, we see that Inuyasha's feelings regarding Kagome herself are not as clear cut and dry as they are in some other stories. You don't have him secretly knowing how desperately in love with her he is, or anything, so that eliminates some of the element of betrayal. At least on his part. How could her mother DO such a thing??? *sigh* It's only a story, it's only a story - I think I'll keep that mantra going for a while. Time to get back to work on my OWN stories...
| Reviewed By: AkiSakura [MediaMiner Member] On: February 01, 2007 23:34 CST
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Kinda gross in the sense of the pairing but other then that is was actually a really really good story ..... :)
| Title: Sanctuary
Reviewed By: sutlesarcasm [MediaMiner Member] On: February 01, 2007 19:08 CST
Comment/Review:
I just had to leave a review for this fic. It got a huge reaction out of me. First, let me say excellent fic. Very well written, which is why it pissed me off so bad. I just turned 50, and my son and his family live with me. His wife's closest friend just went through finding out her mother did this with the boy she had started dating, and had gotten very interested in. Her mother knew how she felt, and did it anyway. She blamed it on the booze. Her daughter will eventually forgive her, but she will never trust her again. I don't know where you got the idea for this, but you did a damn good job. Just about brought me up out of my chair in a towering rage. That's what a good story does, makes the reader forget that it's a STORY, it's not REAL, good job, really good job, I'm still pissed off. Sutlesarcasm
| Reviewed By: KeyTobias5 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 01, 2007 13:53 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I have to say that is one of the best unexpected parings ever. Keep up the good work.
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