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| "A Stranger" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] | Reviewed By: Dwarfwarrior On: June 22, 2007 22:55 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really enjoy it ^^ Please update soon, k? also, Alexei, do you mean hone no oni? I know it's just a typo but I thought I'd point it out to avoid misunderstanding. Anywho, nice story, good description, and I look forward to more ^^
| Reviewed By: Alexeihowe [MediaMiner Member] On: March 01, 2007 11:26 CST
Comment/Review:
hone on oni means demon of bone, noticed you wanted to know bone demon try www.freedict.com for other words and such
| Reviewed By: djohnson [MediaMiner Member] On: February 28, 2007 22:15 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your OC is a classic Marty Sue. He is too powerful (only a genin, yet managed to make Naruto, Sakura, and Kakashi look like a bunch of chumps), every girl likes him, he doesn't have any real flaws (his bloodline limit is better than Kimimaro, and that autoshield is about Gaara level), has a tragic past yet is still a happy go lucky guy, and is so stereotypically cool it's stupid. If you write another story with an OC, please try not to make it such a Marty Sue. But on the other hand, you descriptions of battles and whatnot is great, which makes the OC all the more painful.
| Reviewed By: Valinor's Twilight [MediaMiner Member] On: February 20, 2007 18:18 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
interesting. So are you going to do pairings? Like, KakashiOC, and so on?
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