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| "Verisimilitude: Invasion" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] | Reviewed By: Shadow 6271 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 12, 2007 15:17 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
okey dokey then, here is my real review. first off, i dont think you should use the honorifics in your fic, whilst i know em pretty well and understand their hierarchal meaning (im kinda teaching myself Japanese half-arsedly) a few people wont and i dont really think that it suitsthe characters for some reason. REVIEW: well, there is a cute little AmyKnuckles scene going on here, although id like a ShadAmy in there, one of my faves. And Yey! Mecha is here, and working as a nurse... for some reason. and heres Vanilla and Cream, just around. oh well, maybe you can put a scene with Shadow meeting Cream, i always wonder how that'd go. tell me? have you been electrocuted, seems and oddly accurate description you got here. Great, Shadows insane, i always enjoy that, its noticable in my fics that i like him as mad in head as possible. Ha! he would cheer for Chaos in a fight against Sonic, thats more like it! i hate it when people write em as buddies. and now Shadows gonna get all vengeful, I love that ^^ but hes gone pretty stupid though. anyway, fairly good chapter, Black arms have disappeared (youd think Black Doom would be more.. punctual), Chaos is massivly too powerful, Shadow is mostly on character but i dont really think hed swear a lot, he threatens and shouts "Death to all who oppose me!!" but "No shit" isnt really in there. so.. keep up the good work which ever one of your split personalities wrote this ^^ (and if you want me to review more then you have to review my fics! MUHAHAHA!!). but if you want to reply just email me (one of you).
| Reviewed By: Shadow 6271 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 12, 2007 14:50 CDT
Comment/Review:
and something else before i do a major review, you know its Space Colony ARK right? cos youve been saying Arc.
| Reviewed By: Shadow 6271 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 15, 2007 09:15 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Do more, why did you make Shadow a weakling. and wobbly hedgehog syndrom??? yeah, i am the ultimate life form, take of my rings and i get dizzy and fall down. woo.
| Reviewed By: Diamondthecat [MediaMiner Member] On: April 11, 2007 07:20 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i really love this fic! please update soon!
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