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Reviewed By: Kiyanae [MediaMiner Member] On: January 05, 2011 11:05 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a really good fic, and i'm enjoying reading it. I gave you a 9 out of 10 because i think its impossible to ever have a perfect fic, because there is always room for improvement. just keep pushing yourself and you will reach even higher levels of writing. |
Reviewed By: Naosj [MediaMiner Member] On: April 13, 2010 03:21 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 3 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
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I agree with the people who've spoken before me. The word choice and overall rhetoric of the sentence is lacking depth. As a consequence, you're unable to portray anything beyond "the jist" of what you're trying to do to me. The dialogue doesn't clearly express the feelings of the characters. Beyond simple spoken words, it's the lack of articulate descriptions that following and within it that make it, and it pains me to say it, mediocre. I can see the premise of the story in the actions of the characters and how each person could behave the way you're describing to create this story. However I'm only seeing it because I'm extrapolating from the original story and imprinting additional descriptions to the foundation of your story. If I haven't read YYH and Inuyasha for an extended period of time everything would irrationally hostile and the movement from action to action seem extremely choppy. Of course I'm just being critic. I personally experience similar problems with writing, so I can at least give you credit for the linear consistency with the characters.
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Reviewed By: Trelweny Rosephoenixwolf [MediaMiner Member] On: December 03, 2009 01:23 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Really interesting story so far. LOTS of story so far. O_O I like your way of turning the group demon. *nods* Very interesting. Can't say I've read anything like that before. I'm not too thrilled with Yusuke's behavior right now... 8sighs* He's becoming more of a jerk than normal IC. I suppose I can understand to a point with having to give up his vacation with Keiko but... he's going a little too far. I'm enjoying your pairings. Thanks for making the shift away from a Sango/Miroku pairing smooth & believable. Watch your word errors: threw/through, your/you're, to/too/two, there/they're/their, site/sight, sent/scent, and others. I can't remember them all, but if you run the story through something with a grammar check (Windows Office '07 has one) hopefully a lot of those will be caught -easier than rereading and looking for them. Thanks for writing! *searches MediaMiner page to see if there's a subscription button*
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Reviewed By: Hmmm.... On: October 29, 2009 08:27 EDT
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I thought the general idea of where this fic was going looked interesting, but your characters are not well represented. I'm not trying to offend you, I just wanted to bring it to your attention for the future. In several cases your characters make strange conclusions when you've already given enough evidence for them to have ruled that out. Why is Kagome thinking that the demon wants to attack Kurama when he seems to be concerned about him? And why is Kagome in so much shock when she wonders "does he know about demons?" because, duh, of course he does! How could he not know about demons when he was destroying a small horde of them just a little while earlier! Either your characters have great memory problems, or are not very smart. At all. Just something to consider. I am impressed that you've got so much written; most people quit pretty soon, so your awsome for that.
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Reviewed By: DarkMoonGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: March 14, 2009 22:59 EDT
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grrrrrrr.....when the heck r u going 2 update?!?!? DIE MILKSHAKE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: nightshade41230 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 08, 2008 04:58 EST
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loved the story I can't wait until I can read more,,it was very interesting
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Reviewed By: DarkMoonGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: October 22, 2008 15:06 EDT
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first of all, it was an agreement, not a bet. if you didnt update this chapie i wouldnt have brought the stupid wig! (i was ready to burn it, you know.) and second, you didnt have MY kuramy take his shirt off for all the fangirls, because you know in your conscience, Amaya, the kitsune of darkness, would kill you if you didnt do it for her. nyah!! :P now, update the next chapie. now. DIE MILKSHAKE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Title: Mwahahahaha!!!
Reviewed By: DarkMoonGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: October 16, 2008 15:13 EDT
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YES!!!!!!!! YOU UPDATED!!!!!!! now all you have to do is update on more chapie and i'll wear the wig!!!! you had better update soon!!!!! DIE MILKSHAKE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: DarkMoonGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: September 03, 2008 15:28 EDT
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you and your stupid koga doll
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Reviewed By: DarkMoonGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: September 03, 2008 15:04 EDT
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yeah right! "im updating as fast as i can" my butt! u have TWO chapies for me now, dont u? i know where u live, remember that..... DIE MILKSHAKE!!!!
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Reviewed By: DarkMoonGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: August 22, 2008 15:20 EDT
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I HATE U. i know u r alive because i just called u yesterday and u answered and we obsessed over fruits basket......but thats beside the point! i know u have a new chapie 4 me 2 read and i will KILL u if u dont post it soon! DIE, MILKSHAKE.....i mean lyra er youshiie er whatever....... DIE! THATS RIGHT! U HAVE BEEN DEFEATED BY DMG! NOW U GO TO WHATEVER U R PRISON! ok i shall shut up now.
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Reviewed By: BloodForbiddenVixen [MediaMiner Member] On: August 16, 2008 19:40 EDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
its fantastic please write more soon
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Reviewed By: animenightelf [MediaMiner Member] On: July 18, 2008 00:12 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 3 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I LOVE U LR....I MEAN YOUSHIIE LOVE IT KEEP WRITING OR DIE
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Reviewed By: DarkMoonGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: June 04, 2008 15:22 EDT
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AMAZING!!!!! i just recently aquired an account and i just finished reading your entire story. i love the pairings. Hiei and Sango...the perfect match. i swear theyll kill everyone else *cough* yusuke and kuwabara *cough* before they kill each other. lol. Kagome and Kurama are soooooooo cute! write some more PLLLEEAASSSSEEE? *puppy eyes* ill be watching for it ^_*
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Reviewed By: Lover's Betrayal [MediaMiner Member] On: November 14, 2007 17:02 EST
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EVIL!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Please update ASAP! Will this sorcerer be defeated SOMETIME before New Year's?!!?
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