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| "Family Search" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Title: hey
Reviewed By: Inugrl1 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 15, 2007 21:04 CST
Comment/Review:
Thx 4 the pointers. You didnt seem rude at all, just trying to help, and i will work on that. Actually, this is my first story so yeah, im new at this. lol. Anyway, thank you so much!
| Reviewed By: Millicent_Hellix [MediaMiner Member] On: February 14, 2007 03:47 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
ok, just finished reading your firts two chapters, I dont mean to be rude, just to give you a few pointers. In the begining you had made an argument with inuyasha and Kagome, Really, everyone always starts off with Inuyasha and Kagome fighting cause she need to go for more supplys or for school. After you all of a sudden have Inuyasha Slpilling his heart out about ow he loves Kagome. Another thing that bug me that you doudled space lines and had no paragraphs. Though really, I love the story Idea, and the fact that your bringing in A new Character, an older brother, which I love, And your kept the characters in character, I really hate it when people make Inuyasha seem nice, or Kagome sluty or too bitchy (pardon my language) so thank you. I can tell that your kinda new at this, mostlikly you 3th or second story, I can tell If you really continue on this stroy, you will get better. Sorry if I seemed rude, just hopr i was helping, Ill keep a walch to see if you made a any new chappies. Great job. 8/10
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