Title: Lookin' at a thing in a bag..
Reviewed By: Your SISTAH BeeOtch On: March 07, 2007 22:48 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 2 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
I found that it was quite good, and full of alot of emotion. But you had alot of spelling and grammar mistakes. I also found that your story was very rushed, and while well-written, could be better if you slowed the pace down. As I tell you alot, I will be a beta reader for all your stories, before you submit them, e-mail them to me, and I will check them over, grammar and all. I wont change your writing, but mearly help you get better in it. You have a nack for writing, you just need improvement. Also, I did not like the ending, while it was good, I feel that it would have been better should Malik not have returned.
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