| "Happy Holidays Inuyasha!" Reviews/Comments [ 122 ] |
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Reviewed By: Alliecoolgirl [MediaMiner Member] On: August 02, 2007 22:40 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh My Gosh, That last chapter (with friends like theese) Was completely awesome! Especially the last part! When Kags was stolen by Koga! So awesome! can't wait to read the next update!!!
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Reviewed By: sufferingkagome [MediaMiner Member] On: August 02, 2007 21:20 CDT
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love it
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Reviewed By: Inu Nagi [MediaMiner Member] On: July 30, 2007 20:41 CDT
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wonderful story so far. Ya know i actually LOGGED in to let myself write a review to this story. I actaully read ALL the chapters, which i don't normaly do. It's turning out great love it:) love the part where Kagome has inus shirt on and starts imatating him lol too cute.. perhaps if i get the time I will do some responce art for your fics. Keep up the great job :) -April/Nagi
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Reviewed By: Inu Nagi [MediaMiner Member] On: July 30, 2007 20:40 CDT
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wonderful story so far. Ya know i actually LOGGED in to let myself write a review to this story. I actaully read ALL the chapters, which i don't normaly do. It's turning out great love it:) love the part where Kagome has inus shirt on and starts imatating him lol too cute.. perhaps if i get the time I will do some responce art for your fics. Keep up the great job :) -April/Nagi
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Reviewed By: Mineygirl12 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 29, 2007 18:30 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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I liked this chapter better than I liked the others. Keep UPDATING Pleaseeeee.
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Reviewed By: hoppen On: July 28, 2007 12:28 CDT
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that was just the best
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Reviewed By: xstargirlx [MediaMiner Member] On: July 27, 2007 04:57 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
THAT CHAPTER WAS THE BEST! i came on to the computer really hoping you had updated this one coz it is by far my favourite and you had! it made my evening! very well done. you should update again soon please? x
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Reviewed By: TheEverCriticalLauren On: July 27, 2007 04:23 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 2 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 4 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 4 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'll start with the easy part... xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx the bad things.... your story line changes randomly, often without sufficent explanation or direction. A few small out of character moments. I doubt kagome would back down to kikyou as it is evident her powers are superior and purer. You mentioned not being able to kill something that is dead(kikyou), but that backfires, as kagome could easily call out to the souls in kikyou. You constantly undermind and understimate kagome in her judgement, over all thought proccess, and powers. If you'll notice in the show she doesn't completely allow him to walk all over her. It was not convincing and very out of place for inuyasha to ask for his own demise(in the show if you pay attention he changes his mind about going to hell with kikyou), but now that it's already in the storyline you might be able to save yourself by getting kagome to think further on everyone's actions and convince inuyasha that his idea is dumb, and that he deserves happiness, and though she will remain by his side she'll refuse to see him perish( in the show she says this in her inner dialouge that she wishes him to live((with her)) in happiness). And even if it meant fighting kikyou to the death she could do it with his help. news flash. kikyou is not that powerful and wouldn't put a damper on any of kag's actions regarding inuyasha. unless this isn't a continuation. bad flow in many places. you tend to get bogged down writing in too many unimportant details. You could combat this with inner thoughts and brief flashbacks or simply summing it up( sango and miroku's decision to stay in the village. )noone wants to read babble. Bonding? Very uncharacteristic of inuyasha to ADMIT* to bonding, even as friends, in front of the others. he would do as he always had and made his silent 'actions speak louder than words' approach to mend things between his self and kagome. you often contradict yourself, and their thought proccesses and dialouge are a bit rambling and empty, but i can tell you are trying. Kagome wouldn't let the unclear lines and uncertainty between herself and inuyasha continue. she would demand they talk and be mature about it like the woman she is. Yes i'm aware that in the real story there is an uncertain line, but you extend it too far and make it too indistinguishable In this story inuyasha has leapt out of character a few times regarding him only 'occasionally' caring about kagome. There are too many dumb and immoral inuyasha moments. dont hate. Inuyasha wouldn't tease kagome like he did if he truly held any validation behind his idea of being sealed, or wanted kikyou. And it would only be after he told her he cared. the characters are too blunt on occasion. so many contradictions in this story. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ the good things. sacred bow....nice. good detail in a few spots that did in fact call for it. good flow in a few spots. a few good ideas near the beginning of your story. There are many good things, but it's hard to notice with the constant ever looming cloud of confusion. I suggest you dont take offense to any of this. This is a professional critique and i suggest you take the few suggestions i give you. I understand this is your fanfic and up to you what happens, but think about it this way.....if they made another inuyasha movie and it sucked would you not be dissapointed? what if everyone was out of charater and did things that didn't make sense? I tell you this in hopes to better you as a writer. please take my suggestions, unless you already had something miraclous planned out that would save all the confusion. This story IS good, but with a little work it could be wonderful. It discourages me and other readers to see something SO close, but no dice. i will read your next chapter with hope. if you want to contact me let me know in your AN's. Goodluck
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Reviewed By: sufferingkagome [MediaMiner Member] On: July 26, 2007 00:26 CDT
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love the a/n and the story of coarse can't wait for the next chapter
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Reviewed By: hoppen On: July 25, 2007 13:09 CDT
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hey what's up!i am so mad at you.i cheak every day to see if you updated.so please don't do that again.sorry if you feel like i am being rude.oh yeah about that x thing i thing you sould but make some suspeanse.
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Reviewed By: Anime-Eyes On: July 24, 2007 17:12 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
MAKE IT X RATED MAKE IT X RATED!!!! lol sorry, anyways this is a awsome story Keep Up the Good Work!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: xstargirlx [MediaMiner Member] On: July 22, 2007 03:06 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this is my favourite so i think that you should update now. thankyou.
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Title: November
Reviewed By: Novemberkid [MediaMiner Member] On: July 21, 2007 05:33 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
In the serie InuYasha never would lost him self over kagome, because he has promised to protect her and all that stuf. So what i´m trying to say is that if InuYasha loses him self over her, its not like him, Its out of character. But, I SO FUCKING LOVE YOUR STORY!! =D Its so.. So.. I dont know what to say..Its just so freaking good!! Every time i se that a new chapter has been added, i just jumps the whole way to heaven! =D excuse my bad English, im from sweden, so i did the best i cuold to make you understand whath i mean^^, //Jessi
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Title: I'm Back
Reviewed By: Nyuka [MediaMiner Member] On: July 20, 2007 01:19 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hello I thought I had this story saved to my Fav's but I think that was when my computer shut down....which sucked by the way...but any way I thought you just wern't updateing so I was going to give you a poky review to get you started when I reolised that I didn't have it in my fav's and I got all freaked out....The title aluded me but then I ran across it from shear luck and I automaticly saved it to my fav's so I wouldn't do that again...but any ways I got to read a lot of realy koo chapters and I am realy happy about that XD I got to read them all at once....to bad that Inuyasha and Kagome's adventure with Miroku and Sango (and Shippo too I guess) have come to a end....that is soo sad and with Inuyasha tell Kagome to kill him she is not wanting to get to close to him....not that it was helping....hehe....this is such a cute story....I just hope that things work out for them because I don't want Inuyasha to die....I mean Kagome could just KILL KIKYO no one would care even Inuyasha I beleave would be happy to be relieve of the bind she has on him.....I hope it all works out....sigh....any ways I hope you up date soon sorry that I just thought you did update....Nyuka
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Reviewed By: Leigh ana On: July 18, 2007 17:39 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
update soon can't wait for the next one. i love this story.
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