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| "Introverted" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Title: So far so good.
Reviewed By: Banov [MediaMiner Member] On: March 18, 2007 13:59 CDT
Comment/Review:
This was short, barely a page and a half, so there isn't much room to critique. Not tha prologues should be longer, but, for a comprehensive review it isn't a lot to work with. I don't think I'm ready to give comprehensive number ratings, but I can at least look at what we have. The descriptions were nice. Your use of language painted Kyrie's contemplative attitude well. I think when you begin to talk about her being mute, you get a bit too emotional and profess a lot. You spend the majority of this talking in circles poetically about how she's abandoned friendship and whatnot, when I think you could have spent much less sime lingering on it. Also, you mention Proffessor Oak's concern for the snorlax rolling onto her, but it was sort of pointless drivel. I'm not quite understanding what the point of that passage was supposed to be. No, your writing isn't bad. I do this to everyone's. In reality, it was really quite good. I'll be looking forward to seeing more of Kyrie!
| Title: It's a great job!
Reviewed By: Matsuo On: March 05, 2007 12:04 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well you see, first of all You are good, but you can still improve in that style of writing. You could add more 'expressions' to your enjoyment factor and anything. So as I voted 2 9's and 2 10's so I guess I'll have to give you Just 9/10 . Good enough already right? ^__^
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