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| "Watch The Sky" Reviews/Comments [ 7 ] | Reviewed By: ANGELBOY613 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 17, 2008 01:25 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
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Can't finish it. Don't even want to flip to the end to see how it ends. Count how many times you said and expressed Osgood's fury this chapter alone. BORING and psychotic.
| Reviewed By: ANGELBOY613 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 17, 2008 00:36 CDT
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((Now that he was close to his twin, he was reminded of how irked he felt whenever Richard was harmed.)) Osgood feels bad when richard is missing and hurt by others_but he doesn't mind toruturing him at all. Why would he be helping a super hero-seemingly wanting to and enjoy doing it and helping others- yet he's some twisted fuck who tortures his own brother and doesn't mind killing.6 chapters into story. Still don't know what 'them' is. Still don't have a relationship between Virgil and Osgood or Richard. And nothing between HotStreak and Osgood or Richard. So much story written and so little told.
| Reviewed By: ANGELBOY613 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 16, 2008 23:27 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Comment/Review:
5 chapters into the story and I still don't know what it's about. A bunch of random, crazy unexplained events, one after the other. And you don't have 'osgood' as the pre-gear genius he's supposed to be-why would he be acting so stupid and helpless and not applying logic and statistical thinking. The 1st chapter you mentioned 'them' and all this story and you still haven't explained 'them' or 'their' purpose in the story. This is nothing like your other 2 stories I read. At least they were exciting and made sense.
| Reviewed By: Carol Coates On: April 23, 2007 00:27 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I wonder if Ozzy caused the wreck? Cause if the car didn't hit Richie, what did it hit? Great ending!!!! If that doesn't leave room for a sequel I don't know what would. I'd like a sequel, I also request some HR oneshots-cause I just like them. Any story you write I will definitly read- cause you are my most favorited author on the net- whose stories I read the longest. Please keep up the fantastical job, alright?
| Reviewed By: Carol Coates On: April 10, 2007 09:18 CDT
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First of all, it's really hard to type with the ground shaking underneath my feet- damn steamrollers. Okay, hmmm, after rereading the chappie twice, what ever big that you feel that you are missing- I have no clue. Except, how did HS know about Them? before he just mentions things happening, in the last chappie. Also, is HS trying to be big man acting like he got some from R? Cause it sounds that way when V confronts him. Hmmm, another thing, was HS there when They attacked? Cause if he was, how did he get away? One more thing- Love it how HS puts his foot in his mouth, trying to defend himself when he doesn't even know what Static was going to ask. Keep up the fantastical job. And I shall go and wait in my happy place for the next chappie.
| Reviewed By: Carol Coates On: April 04, 2007 07:25 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Dang! I thought I'd finally get some HR action. Oh well. Though if they really did break up, then Richard could claim that Hotstreak was stalking him or something. I don't think this is just like all your other stories- for one you seemed to have split Richie up, gave one to Virgil, and one to Hotstreak. Hmm, I'm also wondering about how the twins will 'plain away the shadow men in the pictures. I can't picture them doing that so easily. Please keep up the fantasitical job, and don't worry about wasting my time- I love wasting my time- I mean, I love spending my time reading your fics especially. They are so different from what I usually see.
| Reviewed By: Carol Coates On: March 20, 2007 10:43 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm so happy, before I even have a chance to read the last chapter, another one pops up! I love how different this is from all the other Static fics out there. Also, Oz is insane. Nothing else to that. Oh! And Hotstreak's here! YEA! --- you're not going to kill him off now are you? Please keep up the FANTASTIC job!
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