| "Saiyajin Training" Reviews/Comments [ 20 ] |
Title: Saiyajin Training
Reviewed By: Megan Consoer [MediaMiner Member] On: December 31, 2005 20:32 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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Title: saiyajin training
Reviewed By: ramades On: May 09, 2005 14:25 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i love your story. i really hope that you get this and put the real "final chapter" up. i would love to see what happens on their wedding day.
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Title: well done
Reviewed By: Boru On: February 16, 2005 14:14 CST
Comment/Review:
You have done a wonderful job of creating an enjoyable story. The only thing I could suggest for improvement is to cut back on the needless exclamations. In all of the chapters, you have at least one point where you make a little side comment of your own. For the most part, these are not necessary and distract the reader from the story. Your writing is too well developed for the reader to be distracted from it. Overall, well done. I hope to see more soon.
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Reviewed By: TRUNKS' LIL BITCH On: July 10, 2003 21:12 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
THAT WAS A REALLY GOOD FANFIC U WILL DO GOOD ON YOUR FUTURE FICS AND I REALLY LIKED THE ENTERNAL SAIYIN THING IT WAS VERY COOL WELL GOOD LUCK ON ANY FUTURE FICS
TRUNKS' LIL BITCH ^_^ |
Reviewed By: firelord On: May 17, 2003 09:35 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i loved it so much i read all 12 and your coments in one night. i wish you would cont. atleast untel they have a wheding! |
Reviewed By: gohans_girl_ashia [MediaMiner Member] On: April 04, 2003 14:30 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
sorry but your storry is so good that i kinda well.... i um.. read it in 1 day tee hee lots o luck and lol buh byez!!!!!!
-plz read my fickies plz o plz o plz!!!!!!!!!!!!! |
Reviewed By: Bardock On: January 27, 2003 10:37 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Pan and Trunks fics are some of my favorites. Exsecialy in the lemon department. I am Pan's great grandfather after all! |
Reviewed By: DBZ Lover On: January 06, 2003 17:54 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was the final chapter? Please put a wedding chapter, it doesn't feel right to just leave the story like that! Anyway, great story, I can't believe I'm only the 13th person who reviewed this, more people should review, *hint, HINT to all the people out there!* |
Reviewed By: April_DBZ_lover On: January 04, 2003 22:09 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG!!! T/P fanfics are the ultimate. They are the greatest. And this one was the best. But I have to say Marron And Goten do not match in this fic in others yes but this one it just didn't seem right. Don't know why but it is just like that. But otherwise it was the best. |
Reviewed By: Pia Bartolini [MediaMiner Member] On: December 06, 2002 01:49 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
I liked this story - it began good, it was original, and pretty well written. But I think in an over-zealous attempt on the wow factor you sort of ruined it. I loved the whole hide-the-bond-and-train-in-secret thing, but I think you overdid it by adding new transformations and action. It would have worked out a lot better had you either just dropped the action at the end or spent A LOT more time developing it. It just felt really out of place, that's all. But overall, I really did enjoy the story - - - if you ever do a rewrite, however, maybe you should lead into the action a bit more. I hope this constructive criticism helps....peace out, God bless, and have a great Christmas season! |
Reviewed By: ssj trungeta [MediaMiner Member] On: November 18, 2002 13:48 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great story up until the bit where Trunks announces the relationship. I thought that after that it just got rather farfetched and WAY too weird! The ending was good though. Don't write a wedding day, it's not necessary. You've already got a perfectly good ending. Get on with your next fic!
Spelling answers:
Syndrome
Choazu (I think, but it doesn't matter - there are LOADS of different spellings for this name!) |
Reviewed By: The crazy One [MediaMiner Member] On: November 14, 2002 21:28 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
YeY!!! I love TxP! I'm writing one now! So everyone read it! Isn't it Chaotzu? I think that's how you spelled it, but that's how I've always seen it spelled....or something like that, I can't remember. And isn't it 'OH DENDE' (however you spell his name) in GT? Just what I thought, although I wouldn't go on what I say....Alrighty! People won't leave me alone so I have to stop my would-be overly long review. Anyway, yeah you should do an epilouge, or make some more chapters leading up to the epilouge. And if anyone reads my story, I need some help! Thankies!
~Lots 'o' Love~
*Crazy One* |
Reviewed By: LilCyborg [MediaMiner Member] On: September 10, 2002 20:36 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh...my...god...THIS IS THE BEST FNFIC I HAVE EVER READ! Yup, I'm what ya might call hyper. But seriously, this is SO good! I LOVED the ending! I wouldn't write another chapter...but maybe you could make a little epilouge-type-thingy...I dunno, I'm a horrible author so you probably shouldn't take my advice, but whatever. This is SO incredibly GOOD! I'm insanely obsessed with Trunks and pan, but it's so hard to find good fanfics about them! Most of them are just stupid and plotless with horrible spelling and grammar, and only written to bash Marron. But this..is so...amazingly...wonderfully...incredibly...fantastically...uh...*tried to think of a word to describe it* GOOD! Erm...yeah...how many times have I said good in this review? *counts* Four. Well, never mind, this isn't just good, it's GREAT!!! ^___^ |
Reviewed By: SSJ4PAN On: August 25, 2003 10:28 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ONE MY PERSONAL FAVS I LOVE IT YOU SHOULD DO A SEQUEL WERE PAN AND TRUNKS GET MARRIED AND HAVE A CHILD |
Reviewed By: LilCyborg [MediaMiner Member] On: July 20, 2002 23:02 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WONDERFUL JOB!!!!!! Now you've gotta write more or I'll come after you with Bob's muffins of doom! *evil laugh* MOOOO HAHAHAHAH!!!!!!!
*sweatdrop* Yea...ignore me...
Anyway, GREAT work, I can't wait to see more! |
Reviewed By: Sam On: July 19, 2002 23:16 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really enjoyed it. Please update soon. I'm anxious to know if trunks and pan marry. |
Reviewed By: minime On: July 03, 2002 22:40 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
LIKE U SAID TP FOREVERRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRR |
Reviewed By: Trunks&Pan4ever On: June 28, 2002 09:01 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This fic is one of da most original fic i have read. Pan turning eternal sayain and all. I luv this fic keep on writing!!! |
Reviewed By: cherryblossom0286 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 06, 2002 18:31 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Look'n foward to your next update :D Very creative |
Reviewed By: crystal(cristty) On: May 31, 2002 21:34 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
man your a great writter. i give u this rating cause 1. its bout pan n trunks 2. its very creative and 3. it a VERY VERY VERY COOOOOOOOLL story.
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